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    dots Submission Name: Your Goodbyedots
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    Author: AngelOutlaw
    ASL Info:    21/female/OR & WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.37 - 672/392/64
    Words: 258
    Class/Type: Prose/Betrayal
    Total Views: 1323
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1293



    Description:
       When I wrote this, it was specifically about my dad and my former best friend. However, things with the friend are way better now, and I realize, reading this again, that this really applies to everyone who has ever hurt and will ever hurt me, because they can't give those back to me, and I can't take them back, so I have to find my own way to deal with it.


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    dotsYour Goodbyedots
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    Often times, the thing that you want to do the most, the thing that would make everything so much better, often times, that thing is the one thing that, for whatever reason, you just cannot do.

    For me, that one thing is forgiving you, saying my goodbye. I want to do that more than anything else, and it would make my life a heck of a lot better. But, whatever of myself that I gave to you, I have yet to get back, and until then, I can't say goodbye.

    Is it the trust I bestowed on you that you broke? Is that the piece of me that I will never be able to get back? How am I supposed to let go of betrayal?

    Is it the time I invested in you that you dismissed? Is that the part of my life that I will never be able to have back? How do I forget those years of my life?

    Is it the love that I never stopped giving that you took for granted? Is that the hole in my heart that will never stop bleeding? How does a wound the size of a human heal?

    Whether it's the trust, the time, or the love, you have a piece of me that no longer belongs to you, but that, no matter how much you want to, you can never return to me. So, I will find a way to forgive you despite that. Somehow, some day, I will say my last goodbye.




    Submitted on 2006-06-06 21:50:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A great way to put your feelingsinto this one. It is a great write though i think you held back on a few things. I loved it though and the best thing is relating to a person's feelings through their writing.. I connected with it on many levels i wnet therough the same experience with a girl that was my best friend she knew every single thing about me that their was to know we loved each others company i loved her and i thought she loved me back 3 or 4 years she had me to herself just me and her then she started dating one of my friends which was fine but she started telling him all my secrets and started drifting away slowly but surely and the last year of school with her we hardly ever said a word to me now shes coming back into my life telling me she wished she never did it but i can never bring myself to say its ok she took years away from me. it hurts but thats life you brought me back to then so good job alright ill be back for more.
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by wallya20 | [ Reply to This ]
      amazing. what can i say? this is definitely gonna be one of my favorites. the last stanza is by far my favorite and i love the way u ended it. kinda sad but optimistic in a way cuz ur getting over that person and what they've done to u. ur moving on with ur life
    | Posted on 2006-06-06 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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