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    dots Submission Name: Open Your Eyesdots
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    Author: sunset
    ASL Info:    21/F/Melb, Australia
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 76/46/32
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       My friends thought he would break my heart, I thought maybe one day he will love me...


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    dotsOpen Your Eyesdots
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    Hear her words
    Question her motives
    Am I happy?
    Or just a fool…
    Open your eyes
    He says to me
    Search to find
    The kindness
    I know he cares
    He’s always there
    Catching me,
    Carrying me
    When I fall
    But he won’t say
    Will never stay
    I cannot breathe
    Through this day
    As I stumble
    She says to me
    You have forgotten
    All the ones
    Who were important
    Now they stand
    At a distance
    Looking on
    With their concern
    I guess I wonder
    If it is me
    Who is blinded
    Open your eyes
    They say,
    Yet all I see
    Is him…




    Submitted on 2006-06-07 01:30:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      First of all let me say that the triangle of characters here was a bit confusing at first since there is not punctuatiion of stanzas breaks to tell where the switch is in attitude. Your describing this from several points of view. Make sure your reader knows up front which belongs to whom.

    It's hard to know what the future holds and sometimes we get stuck in patterns. My advice is not to get so caught up that you ignore your other friends, and don't bet that he doesn't see the change in your feelings of friendship. We often ignore what we are not ready to handle..especially if it entails changing the status quo. Only time can tell, but be warned it can take a long time to come about. With my own parents who were best buds in high school, it took almost two years and countless dates with other people before they were at a place where they could both admit that they were in the same place. If it's meant to be Fate will throw you together, but don't ignore your other friends. You may need them for support if things get rocky.
    | Posted on 2006-06-07 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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