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    dots Submission Name: The Enddots

    Author: sunset
    ASL Info:    21/F/Melb, Australia
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 76/46/32
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Enddots

    In the end
    The tears I cried
    Do not seem wasted
    He needs space
    He does not need me
    I want him
    But we cannot be
    All the people
    Who turned away
    Have come back
    To hold my hand
    But all I want
    Is him to hold me
    All I want
    Is for them
    To understand
    I always knew
    It would come to this
    He would let go
    And there they are
    All the people
    Who warned me
    But they’re not right
    I am not angry
    Silently I’ll wait
    Maybe he will miss
    All the things
    That made me stay
    Even though I knew
    He would let me go…

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      Oh wow...I love this... but I hope to God I never feel what the person in this poem is feeling. To KNOW that someone is going to let you go...to know that it will never last, but still keep the faith and still believe in your love, is so hard. My favorite line was when you said maybe he'll miss all the thing that made me stay...I just thought about if my boyfriend ever left me, with the crazy relationship that we have, I would want him to miss everything that made me stay with him for all of these years. I could feel the pain and the hurt in this...it was beautiful in a heartbreaking way...but beautiful nonetheless...great job. ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2006-06-09 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      this is truely a fantastic poem, i've been in this situation; people saying "i told you so" making me angrier and angrier, because i wanted to hate her but the more other said it and egged me on to hate her the more i thought well shes not that bad and the more it hurt!
    | Posted on 2006-06-07 00:00:00 | by Topher Vine | [ Reply to This ]

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