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    dots Submission Name: Hay Feverdots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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       Woke up with the fever this morning lol


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    dotsHay Feverdots
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    Hay! Fever!
    Not a thing to be sniffed at!

    Tickle my tonsils and
    my eyes will run away.

    'Snot nice you know.

    Bring me a sneeze
    on a breeze.
    Waaaaaaahoooo!

    Pollen ate my sanity
    in a golden glow
    and made me cry.

    Honey! Honey!
    Will you save me?




    Submitted on 2006-06-07 02:50:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      haha, i liked it, it was entertaining!
    | Posted on 2006-06-07 00:00:00 | by Olala_Rachie | [ Reply to This ]
      Very clever! especially the last line. Spring is here and a haze of chartruese floats through the air. Hope you get a fresh breath soon.
    jan
    | Posted on 2006-06-07 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      HEE HEE This is very funny and to think that Hay fever is probably one of the most commom ailments there is.

    I like the spin you put on it too.
    Snot nice you know....thats good

    Thsi was nicely done

    Honey for a cold is an old remedy.


    Respect and Admiratrion

    Clyde
    | Posted on 2006-06-07 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
      I quite like this one, and I know exactly what ha fever feels like. This made me scribble down a line that'll hopefully grow into a poem. I like the irony of calling of honey. It's a folk remedy to eat local honey for hay fever, but it never did a thing for me. I guess the theory is that it comes from flowers, so it's kind of like how they make vaccines from weakened viruses. I like the pun of "'Snot nice" and the alliteration of "Tickle my tonsils." You're a witty one, Amy
    | Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


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