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    dots Submission Name: Scream Diversitydots
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    Author: Seiraryu
    ASL Info:    21; Male; BA, Argentina
    Elite Ratio:    5.31 - 110/73/22
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsScream Diversitydots
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    Scream!
    Your life is a lie and your world is a dream.
    Bring into your mind the concept of individuality.
    Accept it.
    Deny it.
    But -bring it!-
    Assimilate only when you've no other choice,
    and return to freedom when you're good and ready.
    We'll be watching you from the stars.
    We'll be hoping you remember that not only are we here,
    but we are waiting.
    We'll be dying and living and dreaming and screaming.
    But we'll be here. In the stars. Waiting for you.
    Remember your choices; remember your liberty.
    Live free.




    Submitted on 2004-05-13 02:15:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked the overall idea of this poem. not contrived in the least and seemed a little understated, but a good poem none-the-less. enjoyed the ending, it reminded me of something you would see back in the 70s.
    | Posted on 2004-05-17 00:00:00 | by colagirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Very strong and the point is pounded into the reader. 'We'll be dying and living and dreaming and screaming' is a very nice line to have placed.
    | Posted on 2004-05-13 00:00:00 | by pyrestarter | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i LOVE this! your voice comes through loud and clear!
    'Accept it.
    Deny it.
    But -bring it!-'
    this is AWESOME!! i love these lines!
    i love this whole poem... i love the stars part and your first two lines are marv!
    | Posted on 2004-05-13 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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