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    dots Submission Name: must be nicedots
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    Author: unknown soldier
    ASL Info:    17/kenner, La (N.O)
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 1348/1346/203
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 1216
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1130



    Description:
       i just kinda remade the song by Lyffe Jennings. i changed the chorus slightly. don't worry. i have two more verses to post


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    It must be nice having someone you can relate to
    Someone who knows they can make you or break you
    The first time’s a failure but it gets better on take two
    Cuz you know they’ll always be faithful
    The love is unconditional so they would never forsake you
    Must be nice having a place in their arms that you can escape to
    First they love you then hate you
    Like Mary J. Blidge, I’m in need of a breakthrough
    MUST BE NICE
    To be with someone through sickness and health
    No gold diggers, she isn’t with you for the wealth
    They know you so well
    Speaking with them is like talking to yourself
    Although your feelings may feel often on the shelf
    They can still make your heart soften ‘til it melts
    Can love in itself is like walking on broken glass
    But the sun always shines brighter after the overcast

    Even when your life is going wrong
    She’ll be by your side still holding on
    Even when those 20s stop spinning
    And all those gold digging women disappear
    She’ll still be here




    Submitted on 2006-06-07 23:05:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I tried not to cry as I read this. I try to be this kind of woman and feel I am. My bf and I had a bit of a spell, I tossed him out, but relaized he was like my second lung, I could live without him but was it worth it? You described loved as it truely is. This was some of the best stuff I've read of yours tonight. This is for sure a fav! Your flow was hot, the wording powerful and beautiful. Realisitc and it just melted my heart. Great work!

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      hey bubz, i lurv this one, it flows nice, and the topic is something i like to hear, its betta to have real love than fake gold love,
    keep em cummin babe
    kyrenia
    | Posted on 2006-06-08 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      must be nice...lol anyways this was good. it flowed nicely toghter i could hear it in my head as i read it. It rythmed nicely so yea keep 'em cummin and don't stop rapping....and when i say cummin i don't mean...nvm

    DePoetry
    | Posted on 2006-06-09 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      hey u!!! i like this one! a lot its wa really sweey!! damn sweet! ahh i cant spell! ok u noe da drill i dont have 2 explain myself!
    ~akaila~
    | Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      u a fag real [censored]
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by heavy knowledge | [ Reply to This ]
      man i read this an hour ago and called somebody to read it to'em and [censored]in forgot to comment. man.. this reminds alot of me and brittany... that [censored] makes me so [censored]ed up you should read my "forever?" I want to know what you think about it
    | Posted on 2006-06-10 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]
      this was a nice sincere write. I never heard the original but maybe i will look it up.
    A real relationship i think should consist of forgiveness and second chances but its hard for anyone to believe in a partner being faithful after they have been caught.
    "To be with someone through sickness and health
    No gold diggers, she isn’t with you for the wealth
    They know you so well
    Speaking with them is like talking to yourself
    Although your feelings may feel often on the shelf"

    i like these lines
    PC
    | Posted on 2006-06-11 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]
      Lemme start by saying...Lyfe Jennings....that CD is the sheeeeit. You can bump that from beginning to end. Not too many CD's exist that you can do that with.

    This was nice! You always have a way of taking something and adding YOUR side of it. Kind of reminds me of the great East Coast rappers like Pdiddy, and the B.I.G.

    The thing that I admire the most of you....you are in touch with that sentimental side of yourself. You realize that being in the hip hop game isn't all about being the "King"....it's about lyrically stating from the heart.

    Keep it up!

    Li Li

    *leaves singing* Muuuust be nice.....
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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