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    dots Submission Name: MY LIFEdots

    Author: carolspencer707
    ASL Info:    26/F/SANTA ROSA
    Elite Ratio:    1.96 - 5/12/34
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    dotsMY LIFEdots

    what do you see
    when you look into my eyes?
    can you see the path Iíve followed
    or my soul how it cries
    I was given choices at each bend in my road
    no doubt passed up opportunities that my life
    will never hold
    been welcomed inside
    but choose to stay out in the cold
    not wanting to miss out on anything at all
    that should happen to come along this lonely path I follow
    now I sit here contemplating
    my body tired and hollow, all this time Iíve been wasting
    wondering why my soul didnt follow
    maybe it saw signs along the way
    and saw my life was going astray
    maybe it got a glimpse of all the pain Iíd feel
    something so terrible it just couldnt be near
    so at some point my soul chose to be
    forever floating aimlessly
    the decisions Iíd made are hard to tell
    I think Iím still hurting from when my life fell
    yet even though Im empty inside
    Ive got to keep going pushing on with this fight
    Ive changed my ways
    Ive righted my wrongs
    Ive found the courage to carry on


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