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    dots Submission Name: 8~The Game of Lifedots

    Author: carolspencer707
    ASL Info:    26/F/SANTA ROSA
    Elite Ratio:    1.96 - 5/12/34
    Words: 198
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    dots8~The Game of Lifedots

    every day is the same
    feels like Im stuck in the game
    all I know is I cant do this anymore
    but eachtime I try I cant make it through
    that door
    it just hurts so much
    the anger of your absence in my heart I clutch
    if only I could have somehow known
    Id be the cause of the pain your eyes have shown.
    the last thing Id ever want to do
    is be the one that one of you
    I swore to myself I would always protect you
    not be the one to hurt and neglect you
    what have I done to your innocent hearts
    thinking of my actions just tears me apart
    at times there is nothing to stop my tears
    its difficult to get my mind clear
    I know that I have let you down
    now that Im no longer around
    and I know that you dont understand
    us being apart was never part of my plan
    Im tring so hard to strart from scratch
    each time I get closer something pushes me back
    sometimes I think I cant take it anymore
    keep on trying but really
    whats it all for?

    Submitted on 2006-06-08 01:45:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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