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    dots Submission Name: 11~How Could Idots

    Author: carolspencer707
    ASL Info:    26/F/SANTA ROSA
    Elite Ratio:    1.96 - 5/12/34
    Words: 262
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dots11~How Could Idots

    who gave me the right to bring to this world
    my precious little baby boy and girl
    how selfish was I to crave for their love
    and bring my angels down from above
    not thinking of all I would have to provide
    to satisfiy their needs in life
    what was I thinking as I held them in my arms
    promising to always protect them from harm
    why couldnt I have seen
    the one to hurt them the most would be me
    I cant believe that I had the nerve
    to believe their love was one I deserved
    Ive done nothing but fail at all my lifes quests
    felt only disapointment at all of lifes tests
    I honestly never ment to cause all this pain
    I know their love for me will never be the same
    those familiar tears Ive come to know so well
    fall once again from this broken shell
    I realize I was never ment to smile
    or enjoy the unconditional love of a child
    as this emptiness inside me grows and grows
    the pain gets stronger than anyone knows
    how long will it be till I can bear it no more
    what else does for me does my future hold in store
    Im sorry Olivia Im sorry Julian
    just imagining those big eyes looking up at me again
    I cant handle what your innocent eyes will show
    the same disapointment Ive come to know
    and the fact that it was I who put the pain in those eyes
    for you my soul will forever cry

    Submitted on 2006-06-08 01:47:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is such a sad poem. Unfortunately life is all about making mistakes, and then, learning from them. You cant erase the past, or change anything that has happened but you can make a difference in the present and the future. That is what you need to focus on now. We all do things that later we regret, there is no perfect person in the world. It seems through your words, you are sorry for what has happened and that is the first step towards making things better. You can change who you are if you really want to, you can work on fixing whatever you've done. This is a good expression of feelings. Best wishes.

    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]

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