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    dots Submission Name: 16~What Would They Do?dots
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    Author: carolspencer707
    ASL Info:    26/F/SANTA ROSA
    Elite Ratio:    1.96 - 5/12/34
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 584
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       BY: CAROL SPENCER


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    dots16~What Would They Do?dots
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    I wonder what theyd do
    if I just broke down and cried
    falling to my knees while
    looking up at the sky
    begging for some answers
    that it seems Ill never know
    unable to stop the emotions
    I swore Id never show
    what would they say
    how will they act
    what will they tell others
    behind my back
    will they tell lies about things
    that never took place
    all the while smiling in my face
    all I know is I dont care
    whats being said about me out there
    I know whos really got my back
    and thats me
    all those others we’ll just have to
    wait and see




    Submitted on 2006-06-08 01:51:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't know who you are talking about when you say "they" which is what I love about this poem. Not only have you expressed yourself in it, but you allow the readers to put abit in it to by deciding who "they" is.
    | Posted on 2006-06-08 00:00:00 | by BigDreams | [ Reply to This ]


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