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    dots Submission Name: 23~Undeservingdots

    Author: carolspencer707
    ASL Info:    26/F/SANTA ROSA
    Elite Ratio:    1.96 - 5/12/34
    Words: 219
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 658
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    who in the world would give me the right
    to bring into this life
    my baby boy and baby girl
    the only love I have in this world
    I mean really
    what was I thinking
    my life was already
    slowly sinking
    getting down to my lowest low
    now I got these two mouths to feed
    and all this pain I hope they never know
    all I gave and sacrificied
    just so they could have a better life
    and man after all Ive done
    for the last five years I been the only one
    teaching my son how to be a man
    all on my own never once asking for a hand
    then two years ago came my little girl
    its so hard to think of them out there in this world
    now they’re gone
    and youre telling me to be strong
    cant you see thats what Ive been all along
    you say dont worry it wont be long
    till I
    get them back where they belong
    but I
    dont believe it I think youre wrong
    and I
    dont have no reason to keep holding on
    so I
    can no longer keep these thoughts inside
    but I knew you couldnt handle them
    thats why I lied
    honestly though
    you really should have known

    Submitted on 2006-06-08 01:57:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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