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    dots Submission Name: 30~Wreckagedots
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    Author: carolspencer707
    ASL Info:    26/F/SANTA ROSA
    Elite Ratio:    1.96 - 5/12/34
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 671
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1220



    Description:
       BY: CAROL SPENCER


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    dots30~Wreckagedots
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    My lifes such a mess
    how did it come to this
    my kids are gone
    yet here I am still holding on
    I feel so weak
    Im tired of being strong
    I hear everybodys problems
    but I aint got no sholder to cry on
    I knew this life would be hard
    look what Ive been delt so far
    what more will it take
    why they wanna see me brake
    I probably couldnt bare it if not for
    my kids sake
    even though theyre not near me
    I pray that they hear me
    and I hope they dont hate me
    for how Ive been living lately
    for the wrong choices Ive made
    for how long they had to wait
    theyre hurting inside
    and I know it aint right
    its thoughts like theese that
    keep me awake at night
    as I lay in the dark I cant close
    my eyes
    scared of how I was feeling inside
    Ive got so much anger built up within
    been holding it so long wouldnt know
    where to begin
    feels like its hopeless and Im a lost
    cause
    been tryen to find perfection
    but only found more flaws
    my future doesnt look so kind
    definately not the life I had in mind




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