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    dots Submission Name: 9~What Will it Takedots

    Author: carolspencer707
    ASL Info:    26/F/SANTA ROSA
    Elite Ratio:    1.96 - 5/12/34
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dots9~What Will it Takedots

    some days I feel so hopeless and so lost
    wanting to find happiness at any cost
    how much more will I suffer
    with each new obstical my road grows tougher
    along with that my burden gets bigger
    pushing me closer to pulling that trigger
    sometimes it seems my only way out
    if only there was another route
    another way to continue my journey
    cant anyone hear my plea
    cant anyone understand
    there are times we all need a hand
    for all the emptiness in my life
    Ive filled with wrong doings instead of right
    I cant seem to get my life back
    for failure it seems Ive got quite a nack
    so good at ruining any of my goals or dreams
    its all Im used to all Ive seen
    some things just arnt ment to be
    maybe its best my kids are not with me
    I love them to death
    dont get me wrong
    but I know they deserve more
    maybe it was best all along
    for me to suffer in lonliness for all my sins
    then for us to be a family again.

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