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    dots Submission Name: 29~The Life I've Been Givendots

    Author: carolspencer707
    ASL Info:    26/F/SANTA ROSA
    Elite Ratio:    1.96 - 5/12/34
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 675
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dots29~The Life I've Been Givendots

    my situation is so crazy
    and my vision so hazy
    the lives we live will never
    cease to amaze me
    never thought Id be on this path in
    my life
    nothing but darkness always
    searching for light
    or even just a bend in my road
    I think I need hellp carring this load
    my neck is tired and my sholders are sore
    its ofted I forget who Im doing this for
    as their beautiful faces float through my mind
    all my discomforts are for one moment left behind
    then that moment is gone
    yet Im still holding on
    my heartbeats pride is too much for my soul
    my heart keeps beating while my mind begs to
    let go

    Submitted on 2006-06-08 02:05:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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