How do I tell you? -------------------------------------------
How can I tell you
how much I love you?
How can I tell you
that your smile
send sparks
in my chest.
Your touch
send shivers
down my spine.
How do I tell you
that your eyes
two perfect
shining pools of love
is what I wish to see.
Your voice
the sound of the gods
aproaching
coming closer.
Your laugh
music
playing over and over
in my head.
How do I tell you
that I love you?
i love the unrestrained feeling in this poem, and the short lines that trickle down the page like water, this poem made me think of sunshine and angels however stupid that sounds!! the only crititism was that it needs to be re read with the slight mistakes corrected "your eyes... is what i wish to see" "tell you....you eyes" not that this is a bad comment at all, i liked the "shining pools of love" image as i have often thought that about my boyfriends eyes strangely enough. i really really REALLY identified with this poem as i have felt this way for over three years since i got together with my boyfriend, i hope you and this person either get it together, or if you are together, stay together forever, i hope he feels the same way. regarding the slight mistakes, they only prove the unrestrained heart and emotion that created the poem and i hope you didn't mind me pointing them out. take carexxx Freeangel
Aw, I like the first lines are the same as the last lines, good repetition. Well, you made a few spelling mistakes; you kept putting "you" instead of "your." The "shivers down my spine" part was kind of corny, but still. I loved it. It really easy to read and it asked a question that's so commonly asked but can never be answered.
Submission Name: How do I tell you?
