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Rain falls on everyone.


Author: manicsmuse
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Rain falls on everyone.



The intricate silk flaters the storm
that is sure to float near soon.

The distance becomes something other
than distance.

More like looming familiarity
and the assurance of it frightens me.

I simply cannot put my hands around
the absurdity of the fear,
But I fumble with it anyhow.

Then comes the thunder and I know
the weather is right here now.
I do not take shelter, because the way it validates
me is comforting.

The sickness I swim around is a soft kiss,
a wisper of flight that sets me above it,
all of it, all of you.

A faint reminder that I am better
I am good.

But the cush of my fragile mind stunts the validity
of my pure intend, and I am drowned out.

Then I have to wade in the rain awhile,
untill I get wet again.

Water soothes.

Water suffocates.

I can't breath.




Submitted on 2006-06-08 12:45:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Beautiful imagery.

The end is quite perfect. It offsets (I've been trying to think of that word for days now!) the rest of the almost relaxed tone quite nicely.

Overall, this was a good bit.
| Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by Janelle | [ Reply to This ]
  Ok... I am not really on drugs, however at one time I did use them...alot. The drugs hae had a very bitter sweet effect on my brain. i think the use of hallucinegens have brodened the depth of how I percieve life, and thus comes out in "some" of my work. I am silly to begin with so many times I end up writing things that do not make sence to me. I repeat I am not on drugs. i was just being funny ha ha ha. sorry for the misunderstanding
| Posted on 2006-06-08 00:00:00 | by manicsmuse | [ Reply to This ]
  This is powerful
My Friend I fought 5 long years with a speed addiction and I know exactly of the feeling you are describing
This write for me details a trip you have been on in your mind from the horrible effects of drugs
You wrote this well but I am sure it would have been written better if you werent under the influence
Yesterday I celebrated one year clean and sober and I did it all on my own
If you want help mits out there
If you need someone to talk to just pm me
God Bless
Ron

Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
Ron
| Posted on 2006-06-08 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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