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    dots Submission Name: The Mirrordots
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    Author: mimi
    ASL Info:    30/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597/390/111
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsThe Mirrordots
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    I stood before the mirror
    to practice how I'd stand,
    how I'd look,
    and what I'd say.
    I practice how I would smile.
    Full,
    Half,
    or with my eyes alone.
    I pictured the steel in my spine,
    the strength in my knees,
    and genuine happiness
    when I see you again.
    I know with enough practice
    I would believe
    that the person in the mirror
    is me.
    The one I want to be.




    Submitted on 2006-06-08 13:04:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The projection of courage and the imagery of practicing to appear so was very well done. The vulnerable aspect of the writer seeps into the mind of the reader as a sie-affect of this reflection.

    A very clever write.
    | Posted on 2006-06-09 00:00:00 | by The Gadfly | [ Reply to This ]
      Dang! Thats a bummer. I stand in the mirror and say..."Neener, neener, neener...bet you wish you could go where I go, but you are stuck in that mirror!"

    HA!

    I liked the strength this one started out with but then when you got to the point of thinking about "them" the uplifting part of this write was 'popped' and set it back into the line of millions of other "sad" writes that are far too abundant. But I commented *wink*.

    Thanks for sharing.


    COMMENT EDIT:
    P.S. There were a few words that were spelled wrong...I dont feel like pointing them out specifically, but if you copied and pasted them into a word type program and ran a spell check...it would pick them up. Anyway, thats all.
    | Posted on 2006-06-08 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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