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    dots Submission Name: ~Memories of 8th Grade_dots
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    Author: Kay
    ASL Info:    15/f/
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 216/197/68
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Misc/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 900
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1133



    Description:
       yeup.. i'm on to high school

    brother said he'll trash me

    and since i knew allot of ppl in middle school

    i have to start all over agian...
    sucks huh? making new friends


    my yearbook was full
    friends got mad cus i made them sign on extra paper

    and the picture pages were kinda full.. i didn't let them sign there. but some did any way

    i love them all.. gosh


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    dots~Memories of 8th Grade_dots
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    Close your eyes
    for one more time
    recall all your memories
    will they ever be forgotten?

    listen to the sound
    blowing in the wind through the ground
    passing us all by; leaving fantasies
    we'll just move on missing the passed


    wishing it could happen again
    dreaming and drowning in your bed
    from another dream
    that used to be from your childhood

    tears and sympothy, and another year is gone
    hugs and kisses, singing an old song
    and walk away as everyone sings
    cus you will be missed


    scream the words through the air
    let everyone know how much you care
    get lost in the streets
    of another memory

    how much you wish
    you can go back to acting as kids
    where a kiss
    just never meant anything
    go back to where
    nothing EVER MATTERED!!!!

    scream nothing
    whisper the words
    let the air blow away your fantasies
    these memories
    will... stay for ever




    Submitted on 2006-06-08 20:32:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can very easily relate to this
    I for one am 37 years old and yet I refuse to grow up
    I hold on to my childhood memories very dearly
    You captured the innocense of youth beautifully in this write
    I am adding this to my favorites
    Excellent Job!!!!!
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-06-09 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a poem that I can relate to, I am also going to High School and I can recall what I did my past years. Now when I see this poem it makes me think of what I've done in grade school and such. You pretty much stayed with the topic about memories of the eighth grade. It's certainly a original poem that tells that your growing up and moving on. I have seventh grade friends that are going to be eighth graders and it tears me to see that I have to leave them for one year. Thanks a lot. *cries* Just kidding.
    | Posted on 2006-06-09 00:00:00 | by Finnigan | [ Reply to This ]
      Aaaahhhhh...such a delight to see someone growing through their write. Yes, those memories will stay forever and who isnt afraid of the future? Heck, no one, HA!

    Now...I dont know if you meant this or not, but it has an air of brilliancy to it...that last word in the last line in the second stanza...passed. Now...because of the sentiment in your write...passed is such a good word...but many might say it should be spelled...PAST. HA! Thats the brilliant part of it...either word will work and not take away from the meaning or sentiment of the write. Thats one of the things about this one that I truely like.

    This is really a mature poem for someone your age...I know, I know...you probably didnt like hearing that...but as you certainly know...sometimes the truth can make a person cringe. Oh well...one thing no one can ever change is...the truth...and the only things that are forever is God and memories and the truth.

    Thanks for sharing and good luck.

    OH! And remember...your brother is still vulnerable to a good, swift kick or knee in "the goods" if he tries to "can" ya! HA! Nothing makes a greater statement to a little sister than being able to take your brother down a peg or two and reveal his inadequacies, HA! I knew my kid sister would do that to me...so I never messed with her in public...hee-hee!

    Good luck and enjoy your summer break!
    | Posted on 2006-06-08 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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