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    dots Submission Name: Inner Paindots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       Just sad today.


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    dotsInner Paindots
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    As I meditate,
    With these painful thoughts,
    I affiliate,
    With the battle inside of me,
    I never fought.

    As I reminisce about my childhood,
    My pain grows in mass,
    I know my life was no good,
    And reality tells me,
    I'm growing too fast.

    I don't know,
    How to stop time,
    Read into the future,
    Or press a button,
    To rewind.

    But what I do know,
    Is that,
    My life has a permanent stain,
    And reality shows,
    That this life of mine,
    Is all an inner pain.







    Submitted on 2004-05-13 10:45:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I agree entirely! There is just too much pain in this wolrd and we all seem to grow up too quickly. I mean, it seems like just yesterday I was sitting in the sandbox eating dirt...lol...Your poem had a great flow and a wonderful sense of imagery....great write!
    | Posted on 2004-05-13 00:00:00 | by darkened_soul | [ Reply to This ]


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