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    dots Submission Name: Drivingdots
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    Author: loveispain
    ASL Info:    23/f/ME
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 283/198/51
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 994
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1436



    Description:
       My boyfriend was just home for his two weeks of leave...and I was following him in my vehicle and he was in his. And I got thinking that me driving behind him was almost like our relationship...I'm always behind him in everything he does...even though we can't be together..even though we're not in the same car, I'd follow him anywhere, no matter how far it was. It was just what I was thinking at the time. Thanks for reading!


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    Can you see me,
    In the rearview mirror?
    I'm the girl in the black SUV,
    Following you down a neverending road,
    Of Love, and Sorrow, Happiness, and Pain.
    I see the back of your head,
    Bobbing to the beat of your Black Label Music.
    How many times have I begged you,
    To turn around?
    Pumping the pedal faster,
    I try to catch you, my love.
    The speedometer surges forward,
    While my heart beats faster,
    And my love for you grows.
    No matter how fast I go,
    No matter how many corners I cut,
    Or how many cars I pass,
    You're still out of reach.
    I would follow you,
    To the ends of the earth,
    If it meant we ended in the same place.
    I'd drive all night, and use up all my fuel,
    If I could touch you in the end.
    I feel like I've been following you...
    For years.
    It's been a steady pace, over a bumpy road,
    But we know the destination.
    There's no map for the road of love,
    But my instincts lead me to you.
    Always know I'm behind you,
    I'll never be hard to find.
    I'm only a glance in the mirror away,
    I'll never fall behind.
    I'm the girl in the black SUV,
    Following you down a neverending road,
    Of Love, and Sorrow, Happiness, and Pain.





    Submitted on 2006-06-08 21:05:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Suprising.. Like a breath of fresh air. It is hard for me to read the lost sad love poems casue they are all the same. I have to say this did feel aliitle different to me and that is why I deem it good..
    | Posted on 2006-06-09 00:00:00 | by manicsmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      AWWWWWWW!
    This is freakin awesome! I loved the description and it made me say, "HELL YEAH!"
    And no man would be ashamed of saying or writing about the same thing to his girl. Yup, ya gotta have each others back.

    Awesome write...I thoroughly understand the meaning and sentiment. He probably drive so fast just to keep up with you as well and thats just GGGGGGGRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR8!

    | Posted on 2006-06-08 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      this was really sweet! im a hopless romantic, and love the thought of someone always being there down love's hard road. looking forward is a good thing, and having a man like the one you have described sounds like a great future. hes lucky to have you, and you him. congrats on love!
    | Posted on 2006-06-09 00:00:00 | by butterfly_chi5 | [ Reply to This ]
      the motives behind this poem were very sweet and charming...but while i was reading it i could help but think psyco-stalker. but don't get me wrong, it was pretty entertaining from my psyco-stalker piont of veiw. toward the end though i was kind of put in my place and got the point. so i suppose you did a decent job at getting your point across anyway. cute poem.

    peace.
    meredith.
    | Posted on 2006-06-08 00:00:00 | by art_is_hard | [ Reply to This ]


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