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    dots Submission Name: The Astrological Charadedots
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    Author: emo-tastic
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    dotsThe Astrological Charadedots
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    And so we, the underwhelmed,
    ask you to join our charade.
    One word
    Four syllables
    Sounds like (ointment)
    (Disappointment)
    The thought of it shudders through our excuses like the
    nothing-promises we made.

    I lay my head down
    and acknowledge our shortcomings by
    citing astrological refuse. Because it
    couldnít be you, or me, or us, or them
    but only fate and the fault of those Gods
    we donít acknowledge.

    You, ever the Gemini you were born
    (or raised)
    are absent-minded
    and absent, my mind rebuilds you
    every time from the newspaper clipping
    of your disposition.

    And so I, the cancer,
    let my fears meet my hopes halfway
    and linger in obscurity,
    forever waiting for
    my horoscope
    to match yours.




    Submitted on 2006-06-08 22:38:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hi, nice poem. I love astrology, so you know, the name grabbed me. Anyway, You should change the word Gods, to gods. There is only one God and it a proper noun,etc... (blah, blah,blah). On the whole its brilliant, I like how the girl blames a failed relationship on astrology, its very interesting and I especially like the last stanza, I used to think it was that easy, sometimes it is, mostly it isn't. Astrology is so much more than just a news paper clipping, people fail to realise that. I'm gonna check out your other stuff, this one was fun.

    *dani
    | Posted on 2006-06-09 00:00:00 | by firefoxvixen | [ Reply to This ]


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