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    dots Submission Name: ONLY IN THE NIGHTdots
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    Author: Psyve
    ASL Info:    53/M/ Bahrain
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 75/102/60
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dotsONLY IN THE NIGHTdots
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    I know there are things you cannot tell me in the evening,
    When the shadows lengthen, chasing out the light:
    Then, for the trembling to be quelled,
    My baby must be held,
    Still, I wish you didnít just need me in the nightÖ

    And, when the morning sun has chased your nightmares all away,
    And has put an end to your nocturnal flight,
    Fortified by light,
    You donít need me in your sight:
    Oh, babe, how come you only need me in the night?

    So, baby, baby, hold me through this morning,
    And Tiny, wonít you stay until twilight?
    Please donít go away,
    If I donít make it through the day
    Oh baby, howíre you going to make it through the night?




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      this was great psyve. i get the feeling that you have wrote about her before, though. the woman resembles "faded blue jeans" and "best of friends" i don't know if this is the same person but still this was great.

    the part i liked the most was the last stanza when you ask how she will go on when you leave and i think you did a good job of asking that.

    sorry my comment is all scattery brained and all over the place.

    -kiddow :D
    | Posted on 2006-06-14 00:00:00 | by the nerdbomb | [ Reply to This ]
      X3 love the end. And, I wish I could write more, but... *showers with praise* I am falling asleeeeeep... I just wanted to check out some of your other stuff. Think I'm gonna stalk you, or something. Something. :D~ Coraz Windy
    | Posted on 2006-06-11 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]


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