Description: I wrote this at home a few nights ago...sleppy me at an early time in the morning. But...there are eyes that I want to read it. And I suppose I would like a few comments as well. Ummm...I guess just tell me what you think and things of this sort.
A Rose to Sleep In -------------------------------------------
I saw you
dancing in the floor
with your arms outstretched for me
Poorly adapted to
but coping with fresh paint
In our new house
I couldn't reach you with my lips
spiderwebs caught them on their way
the webs were moral and good
My lips were dirty
understood their purpose
and they wished to fulfill their desires
They watched you
swiming in blankets of flowers
rose colored hiding lovers
IN the end
I suppose it was all beautiful
something tangible would have
maybe it need not be so
maybe the beauty
Came from her heart
and landed in his hands
and they were only happy there
because nothing could touch them
IN the end I suppose it was all beautiful something tangible would have made it easier
I like these lines...it's almost as if you're saying...there was a moment or a relationship, or just a period in time, and it was beautiful, but if it had made sense, it would have been more. I like it.
My lips were dirty but they understood their purpose
This almost makes me think of that whole deal with me and Tony...it seemed as if everything about me was dirty at that point, but it had a purpose, and I could not have changed it.
They watched you swiming in blankets of flowers rose colored hiding lovers
This makes me think of you guys rolling around in the living room, fighting over those blankets, and there are still tiny confetti flowers stuck to them...I just thought that would be cute.
I liked this very much. I got the feeling of sadness and longing from it, especially in the ending. The lines "My lips were dirty but they understood their purpose" stood out to me. I don't know if I'm way off here but I interpreted that as meaning you had "been around" a while but still know the meaning of loving and wanting someone. I liked the idea of the spiderwebs being the moral barrier between you. Interesting write, I enjoyed the read. Take care, Nicola.
that is pretty cool. i've never felt that. wish i did. it is pretty amazing the things our body and brain go through when we go all crazy over someone and not knowing how to say to the other person. but to have the feelings returned is something i'm not too used to, hehe. you explained it in a really beautiful way -- the feelings being returned part. it is almost that piece of peace that people look for -- that's impression i got from your words. it was really good.
This is a very beautiful write. There are so many strong emotions tied up in it. Longing, love, lust, and shame to name a few. You string them together in such a way only someone who has lived through them can. Its easy to get a glimpse into your world through you words because they are so personable and deep. I truly love it.