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    dots Submission Name: IN MY COURTdots
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    Author: mimi
    ASL Info:    30/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597/390/111
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsIN MY COURTdots
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    Just lie in wait
    while I ruminate
    and formulate the plans
    to set things straight.
    Please don't berate me,
    or dictate how things should be
    because the ball is in my court.
    Are you my soul mate
    or my foe?
    When will I let you know?
    How do I translate
    that I need to set things straight
    all this while you
    lie in wait?
    The ball is in my court.




    Submitted on 2006-06-09 18:52:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      wow feels like a slam or rap poem! Hmm good job overall! Don't let someone tell you how your poem "should" be written it's your masterpiece and it is meant to be different anyways I liked it alot keep it up peace & stay safe...
    | Posted on 2006-06-10 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
      well, my comment on this poem definitely isn't Goo. I thought that after awhile, this poem just became rambling words. A free write might have been a better choice, rather than putting in the work of making the lines rhyme somewhat, but not bothering to phrase of put any of it into stanzas. Rewrite this with a little bit better phrasing and stanzising, and it will be a workable poem, it may even be great.
    Wishing for more
    ~Brian
    | Posted on 2006-06-10 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]


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