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The Pain Of Today

Author: loveispain
ASL Info:    23/f/ME
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Today was so'd think it would get easier..that I'd get used to him leaving...but it never happens. The day after he leaves...I literally mourn for him...and was the worst it's ever been. I love him so much..and I do..I miss him already...but I will love him always.

The Pain Of Today

How was your day?
Was it as hard as mine?
Today a I cried a river,
Of neverending tears.
I fell to my knees,
Too many times,
Covered my face in my hands,
And tried to let you go.
Tried to pretend the love you showed me,
Didn't change me forever.
I begged my brain to erase your smile,
And your laugh, and the way my body,
Trembles under your touch.
I raised my arms to the sky,
And asked God why, He chose to make US,
Hurt so bad.
I stripped myself clean,
Of everything good I felt,
When you were here.
It hurts too much,
To keep it with me.
I held out my hand,
And imagined your fingers,
Intertwined with mine.
Did your heart break with every single beat?
Because baby, my soul is forever damaged.
My love, my life, my heart, my soul,
I miss you already,
But I love you...

Submitted on 2006-06-09 21:43:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Long distance relationships I feel you on this one. Definitely had the same feelings. Anticipation to when you get to see him. And you're so happy while you're with him and then all of the sudden it's back to miles and miles away and you'd wished you'd slowed time down a little bit before and savoured the moments just a bit longer. Heart-wrenching realizations.
| Posted on 2006-07-31 00:00:00 | by kissingadict | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm not going to pretend I know how you feel about your boyfriend ( i take it) leaving for the marine corp, but i related this with how i felt when I said bye to my best friend (who was sort of more than a friend) who died. It's amazing how you put exactly what I felt so many years ago into words. All I can say is that I'm truely sorry for what your going through, its unbearably hard.
"How was your day?
Was it as hard as mine?
Today a I cried a river,
Of neverending tears.
I fell to my knees,
Too many times,
Covered my face in my hands,
And tried to let you go."
That is what i went through when i found out that the person I loved so much was gone. You just want there to be one more hug, one more exchanged smile, one more everything. It hurts too much to think because the moment you start to, it's all you think about.
This poem also made me think of how i feel when i don't see my boyfriend in a while, and how much I miss him and how I couldn't imagine my life without him. It's weird to think that love, the one thing in life that makes it worth living is also the same thing that makes you wish it never happened because it would be the only way to end the pain once its gone. All i know is that caring sucks, it gets the best of us. This poem brought so many thoughts to me that i could talk for hours. You couldn;t have written this any better, it was truely an amazing write. If you need to talk about anything, I'd be happy to listen. i don't know exactly what you're going through, but I offer great advice at times. Take care of yourself! You have talent. Really great job on this poem, I'm definately adding this to my favorites list!
| Posted on 2006-06-11 00:00:00 | by rent_a_fairy | [ Reply to This ]
  Did you um boyfriend, leave for like a marine corp. or something? Or break up? Well, I definetely know what you mean here..A while ago I moved away from my boyfriend (now ex) and I was hard..unbearable..Its like you can't spend a second without this person, and then they are gone..and you wonder why?..and you want them back so just want to hold them and feel them..I guess I'm still feeling like this, I meant someone new..and I dont' live near them, at all..So enough of that..I know how you feel, I'm sorry that you have to feel like this..I know its hard, and my best wishes to you..But this was a great write, very emotional.
Great work, Take Care!

| Posted on 2006-06-10 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]
  This a really good poem. I enjoyed reading, and I could feel the emotion you put into it. I know it's not easy losing the one you love, not being able to see them everyday like you wish, but hang in there. God will protect him and keep him safe from harm. My ex boyfriend actually is leaving for the Navy at the end of this year and I pretend not to let it bother me but as the time gets closer for him to leave it gets harder to hide. He and I have been through so much the past year, so many good and bad times. You know I'd never trade them in for anything. :). But hang in there sweetie, everything will turn out in the end. Be strong :).

God Bless


ps. thank you for your comment on "what matters the most" I really appreciated it :).
| Posted on 2006-07-21 00:00:00 | by my_worst_fear85 | [ Reply to This ]

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