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    dots Submission Name: Ten Ways You Know You Miss Themdots
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    Author: Finnigan
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       Comments por favor. Thanks to: sadtrapofgravit for spotting a grammatical error. EDIT: Starts at 1. now. I guess I was being odd and decided to start with zero.


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    dotsTen Ways You Know You Miss Themdots
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    1. You post tons of comments on their blog.

    2. You think of them when there're other matters at hand.

    3. You think of them when there's nothing to think about.

    4. You eat a whole tub of strawberry ice cream.

    5. You think what will happen this year with them.

    6. You keep on singing Natasha Bedingfield's "These Words".

    7. You call someone else by the person's name.

    8. You remember all the times, good or bad, you shared.

    9. You always thought about them being your Vanilla to your Coke or something else like that.

    10. You write a poem called "Ten ways you know you miss them."




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      i can certainly see why this got so many comments..

    eat your heart out David Letterman--

    this also made me think of the movie..

    "ten things i hate about you" and her poem...

    very cool.

    jacob

    and i agree with razor2 rosary.

    the last line...duh!
    | Posted on 2011-06-03 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Aw, this is so sweet. I really like the ice cream part and the Natasha Bedingfield part. I think I would add something along the lines of weekends being miserable without them.
    I am adding this to faves, even though I have no one to 'miss' ...
    So true and cleverly put :)
    | Posted on 2011-01-06 00:00:00 | by EshyFishy | [ Reply to This ]
      wow very relatable and close to hear well wrote great job
    | Posted on 2009-07-23 00:00:00 | by sparkleshine | [ Reply to This ]
      thats soooo sweet i wanna know who u miss though
    ;)
    | Posted on 2009-07-11 00:00:00 | by ShadowGaze | [ Reply to This ]
      Finny boy, it's beautiful, and so true. Reminded me of my father when my mom left us for good. As annoying as it was, I can relate to it. Well, ironicy of all this was, I accidently clicked on your page for one and for two, I was thinking of someone that this fits to . . . Go Finny boy! *Sends you a muffin*
    | Posted on 2009-07-01 00:00:00 | by Scaredheart | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it, and strawberry is my fav. its blunt and to the point but made me guffaw once, just cuz its so true-sheepish grin-
    | Posted on 2009-01-02 00:00:00 | by Strawberryjynx | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i know what u mea.

    "all the times good and bad" i think about my ex and be cheated on me and letf me cuz i didnt want to have sex at 16yrsold..i still miss him every day and want him back...

    1. every tv show reminds u of them
    2. u cry in the middle of history class cuz thats his fav class.
    3. u read poems like this jsut to teast urself adn c if u still miss him.

    cant keep writrin i may cry...lol but this was very nice, good to c someone can feel the same way u feel about someone..keep up the good work..
    _tayla_ aka SickOfHurting U
    | Posted on 2008-09-07 00:00:00 | by SickOfHurting U | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay, so the part about Natasha Bedingfield nearly had me falling out of my chair. I wasn't expecting that at all. I mean, I sing it...a lot...while thinking about...

    Well, lil bro, you've done it again. You are the kid who keeps throwing a metaphorical stick into my literal world.

    My top ten:

    1. Times the amount of times you tell yourself you are going to stop thinking about them by ten, and that is how many different things make you think of them.
    2. You keep seeing their face.
    3. You look up lyrics, just to find a song that says just how much you miss them.
    4. Nothing feels right. Your favorite chair has a lump, your favorite song is off key, and your dog sounds like he is talking to you...and you're talking back.
    5. You keep telling people you aren't thinking about that person. (You were the one who brought it up)
    6. One page of your journal is covered, top to bottom, with nothing but their name.
    7. You start watching sad movies.
    8. Listening to sad songs.
    9. Looking at pictures of them.
    10. Are glad someone else posted a "Missing Them" poem, before you did.
    | Posted on 2008-06-24 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]
      * 1. ... there're (or there are) ...

    Cute.

    (natasha beddingfield haha)

    Curious to know why you started at zero. It's kind of odd...
    | Posted on 2008-06-10 00:00:00 | by sadtrapofgravit | [ Reply to This ]
      10. You are insanely crazy, and realize that they are not real, even after you wrote such a list about them lol

    I liked this one also, and tis very true. I have felt this way about several people, BUT I ate vanilla ice cream not strawberry. lol

    Great read/write.

    Duv
    | Posted on 2008-02-22 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]
      Some of that almost made me laugh until I realized how true it is. Number 10 would have to be my favorite though. Very good point.
    I'm sorry I can't make this longer, but I have the worst headache EVER, and staring at the screen definitely isn't helping haha.

    Good stuff.

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2007-09-28 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]
      10. not even rational criticism could make you miss them less.


    i know this feeling.


    kitsch.
    | Posted on 2007-09-23 00:00:00 | by kitsch | [ Reply to This ]
      this is true, i think of stuff like this all the time, i am always confused and you def know you miss a person when they are always on your mind....
    i don't get the vanilla to you coke comment is it kinda like a nick name like thing, or the fact that without them you feel like your incomplete?
    n e way, good write

    Bella
    | Posted on 2007-09-15 00:00:00 | by IsabellaAurora | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn, are you psychic or something?

    I'm faving this one. Definatly. (Sorry about my spelling. It's 2:47 in the morning. ><)

    I really like the "Vanilla to your Coke" part. Very creative, indeed...
    Number 0, 1, and 2 are definatly right here. I miss somebody very much and I do those things, what it seems like, 24/7. ><
    ...
    I'm all sad now. TT
    ...
    But I really liked it.
    -Beth
    | Posted on 2007-07-24 00:00:00 | by crimson_panda | [ Reply to This ]
      ERATTA: 1 and 2
    | Posted on 2007-07-16 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I miss tons of people, and I never do any of these things, besides 2 and 3, maybe that's just me....

    I guess I'm a Dr. Strangelove.

    Wishing for more
    ~Brian
    | Posted on 2007-07-16 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww. This is so cute and so true. There isn't much to say about it except that you captured how most people feel after a breakup or during a long break between seeing that person. I've been there a few times, especially with the blog comments, thinking about them all the time, and eating strawberry icecream.

    <3

    -- Sasha
    | Posted on 2007-04-22 00:00:00 | by UnderINK | [ Reply to This ]
      Awwwww
    ~Kat
    | Posted on 2007-04-07 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngelKat | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i can so relate to this. i always write poems about my boyfriend. everything that you said i absolutely do. i loved this write.

    <3 black rose
    | Posted on 2007-04-02 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]
      sounds like something i would write....
    | Posted on 2007-03-30 00:00:00 | by XmaryjaneX | [ Reply to This ]
      funny, light, and sweet. i really enjoyed reading this. nice work! keep it up :)
    | Posted on 2007-02-11 00:00:00 | by everafter | [ Reply to This ]
      ma` perfecto. well, maybe not PERFECTo. but close...ever so close....but anyway-i've read some of your...stuff...throughout other ppl's pages and forums and sch. you amuse me. i love it....it kind of annoys me how most of the things you post are so long and i dont have time to read them, yet i cannot stop myself-and therefor must continue...sigh...but oh well. one cannot stop the forces of nature ;)

    ttfn

    %kelli
    | Posted on 2007-02-02 00:00:00 | by GoKart Mozart | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...this is so true, i was reading this and suddenly realised when i got about 1/2 way through them i was sitting there going yep, yep to them all in regards to a friend i dearly miss. Great work in thinking up this and then also putting it out there.
    | Posted on 2006-12-22 00:00:00 | by FLHgg | [ Reply to This ]
      The worst way to miss someone is to sit next to them knowing you'll never have them- Anon
    Quite unexpected structure for a poem! A list of things. Well I was certainly amused by this, and I hope those people miss you too.
    Otherwise I have nothing else to say.
    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2006-11-16 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]
      awww i love this great write its sweet

    haley
    | Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by haley_ima-mess_ | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww man thats sad man yup i miss my high school friends alot some of them are already and a couple of them are going into the military so it is also a little scary but i am not trying to be heartless or anything but ur still young and you have a whole lot more friends to meet .

    much LOVE
    James
    | Posted on 2006-09-28 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh wow.. that was so cute. I guess those are really what we do when we miss somebody.. At least it was close to what I did o.O.

    You're right, when you miss somebody, you always think about them. It hurts, thinking about them all the time, but you can't do anything about it.

    I don't wanna go deep into my personal life.. so lol yea. Instead of These Words, I sang every single love song that was on the radio.. how pathetic.. rite? But, you want them so bad, you'll do anythin to make up the time.

    Reading this.. I think it's about love.. but I guess it's about friendship.. but lol I guess it's just what I thought.

    Keep on writing
    ~*~ Lisa ~*~
    | Posted on 2006-09-14 00:00:00 | by Nani | [ Reply to This ]
      wow?
    cant pm you but guess i'll comment you then!!
    haha you're cocky...
    your bio is too..
    but thats cool with me...
    i have no problemo with it...
    but dude from reading your bio i assume that you are a pretty good writer..
    i'm kinda new at this whole elite site...
    yeah i'll check some of your writings out...
    but haha you're not the only one who listens to hip/hop and R&B
    | Posted on 2006-09-10 00:00:00 | by tarzan | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, I agree with kat, cookie dough Ice cream is the best.

    8. You always thought about them being your Vanilla to your Coke or something else like that.

    I still do this to a couple of friends. This was a great way to remember someone you loved. I think that whoever it was should be proud to have a friend as great as you. as for the friend thing; If they are still alive, keep in touch. If not, then just remember them with things like this. Well Done.
    Wishing for more
    ~Brian
    | Posted on 2006-06-10 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, this is a nice writing, the #3 was funny, and no sense but awesome, but what really touched me was the last one, about writing this, and I felt it, it really touched me the last one because of the atmosphere it shows, and gives the reader, anyway It was great, and I might read more of yours, so take care, and STOP TRYING TO STEAL THE GOD DAM SHOUTBOX AWARD, Its MINE UNDERSTOOD!?!?!?!??! MY SHOUTBOX AWARD, NOT URS, ITS GONNA BE MINE, MINE MINE, NO ONE ELSES! ONLY MINE

    GOD! SAVE THIS DUDE

    cya

    Wolfeye-
    | Posted on 2006-06-16 00:00:00 | by Wolfeye_666 | [ Reply to This ]
      If you miss them, wait until you can move to go see them... try to keep contact until you can move to see them. >.> i'm doing that. A Girl i knew and liked (Since kindergarden) recently moved after 9 school years. to make matters worse, i'm going into highschool but enough about me. If its someone who passed away, just wait for god (or whatever unseen power there is) to take you up to where they are. This was a good piece, i suppose. Everything will be fine if you move on, as Kat says, and i agree.

    ~Bryce
    | Posted on 2006-06-14 00:00:00 | by MowsysWrath | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww!! Hee hee!! I think this is an adorable write. It made me smile as I read it even though it is kinda sad considering it is about losing someone you really care for. I think this list of things could go on and on and on but I really like the top 10 you have come up with here. I personally would dive right in to the icecream too, but for me, it's chocolate. Nothing seems to soothe as much as chocolate does. YUM!! This write is genuine and heartfelt and I enjoyed reading it. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Everyone else says "friend" but the romantic and pathetic person in me (about 89%) thinks 'significant other' or 'latest flame of passion' but i could be way off base.

    I notice that you started with the number 0 thus causing you to end at nine. while this could just be you having a moment or subconciously (can't spell that, sorry) predicting the year that the world will end, I like to believe that you don't feel that your relationship with this person is finished. Nine is not a 'full' number. its a bit akward to end with nine instead of ten and i think you feel that things were not resolved with this person. that is TOTAL over-analization but hey, i'm a writer, what do you expect.

    I'm with you on the strawberry ice-cream but never underestimate the power of coorkies 'n' cream.

    Natasha Bedingfield? hmmm, i'm more of a Queen girl myself or when its REALLY bad, enya but thats only when i feel like drowning in teen angst and sighs.

    I can't offer advice 'cause i don't know anything about the situation whatsoever so do what makes you happy, even if its only for a little while. Thats probably the worst long-term advice you will ever get but i'm a live for the moment person so.......

    thanks for giving me a peice to ramble about for a bit without really thinking or offering advice but way to make me think of my "vanilla to my coke" right when i was getting to be ok with just plain coke! (kidding, by the way, they are ALWAYS on my mind)

    Thanks for sharing,
    SASHA LYNN
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by Sasha Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      Aww...haha, I prefer the Cookie Dough Ice Cream for the kid in me . Okay, serious now. If you miss them so bad, then go and talk to them. Tell them that you miss them and still wanna be friends again. I'm certain that it could be a stupid reason, or a very serious one. If it is serious, be prepared to beg for their forgiveness. And just remember, no matter what happens you will move on, and everything will be alright.

    ~Kat
    | Posted on 2006-06-10 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]


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