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    dots Submission Name: Replacement of a Clapdots
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    Author: emo-tastic
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 571/566/128
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1090
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 588



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    dotsReplacement of a Clapdots
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    yeah, yeah
    you yell in replacement of a clap
    and oh yes
    we ride vertical
    in your too-nice car
    the song calls for more than we anticipated

    you play innocent
    we all play innocent

    tired, I'm tired
    I saw this coming
    (because I've known you better
    than anyone else
    and you've known it from the moment
    I saw you in the baseball cap)

    yeah, yeah
    the song calls for our indifference
    and in your innocence
    you respond with
    yeah, yeah




    Submitted on 2006-06-10 11:07:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this poem just...WOW!
    you are AMAZZZIIINNGGGG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    ILOVEYOU!!!
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    you should check out some of my stuff.
    its real deep.
    you would like it alot.
    my work reminds me of yours too much.
    its like we are the same person.
    i feel every ounce of strong firey emotion you poored into this poem.
    i especially feel a strong inclination toward the yeahs in the poem. i say yeah alot so i really know where you are coming from.
    you did every thing wonderfully.
    you are the next shakespear.
    | Posted on 2007-05-16 00:00:00 | by mr. magoo | [ Reply to This ]
      the descritpion is a relief.. its not horrible. just not spectacular, and normally id do the polite critique not really stating opinion just trying to support and be helpful but today im in the mood for something amazing.
    | Posted on 2006-06-12 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]


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