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    dots Submission Name: Over drivedots
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    Author: MyHeart2Yours
    ASL Info:    18.female.Pennsylavnia
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 96/112/42
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 129
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 632



    Description:
       It's not meant to be understood, but if you want the general version...it's like being pushed to do so much till you just call an end to it.


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    dotsOver drivedots
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    Do you think it’s fun?
    To walk the halls of my mind.
    Strewing your paper here and there
    Clouding up my mind.
    Get Out!
    I don’t want you here.
    I shake the fears away
    but they return to pull me deeper
    I’m a screaming ball of…
    Nothing
    You’ve got control
    Captain, we’ve been over loaded
    Our systems shutting down
    Look out,
    put in over drive
    We’re moving fast
    We’re going to slow
    One foot, then the other
    We’re sinking
    And I’m going down.
    Do you think it’s fun?
    To destroy me such as you do?




    Submitted on 2006-06-11 02:37:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I'm surprised no one else has commented on this, I think it's really good. The meaning isn't totally clear as you said but poetry doesn't have to be understood to be great. I think a lot of people can relate to the feeling of overloading especially as a teenager, it can totally feel like you're sinking so I liked that line in the poem.
    Well done, I liked this.
    | Posted on 2006-06-11 00:00:00 | by Sagirlie | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this poem.I think it was really well written.When i read it a stream of pictures like a slideshow kinda thing which is really cool keep writing i hope to read more of ur work soon :D
    | Posted on 2006-06-11 00:00:00 | by kapri49 | [ Reply to This ]



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