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    dots Submission Name: Nice Guys Finish Lastdots
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    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Like the title says its a poem about nice guys and how they always seem to finish last when it comes to getting the things they want.


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    Racing down the same lane,
    Practically the same way,
    Wonder why people say,
    Nice guys finish last.

    Everyone awknowledges it,
    say "he is the nicest guy around,
    the sweetest around here,
    the sugar around this town".

    But then again he never gets what he wants,
    Has tried but never succeded,
    "I want to get it right for once",
    The thought that in his head was ringing.

    But no matter how hard he tried,
    another always stole what he aimed for,
    and at night he cried and cried,
    nobody really cared for.

    He kept getting up day after day,
    with a fake smile on his face,
    thinking to himself "let this be the day,
    when I can finally prosper".

    So no matter how hard the going got,
    He kept going on and on,
    Being nice guy left that shell fast,
    Realized nice guys finish last.




    Submitted on 2006-06-11 08:05:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There is truth in this. A lot of truth. I know that I have had my hands on a "nice guy" and I let it go. He loved me to death and would have done anything for me. Yet, at the same time...there wasn't any personality. I think that the personality is what makes the person. Anybody can be a "nice" person...yet when they have that personality to compliment their ways....that can go a lot further. Just depending on being nice and nothing else...that won't take you the extra distance at times.

    I think you have a lot of heart. You will get what you deserve. All things take time and patience. And when you finally let go of wanting control....it will come to you uncontrolled.

    This was greatly written. You have a lot of soul and that shows through the way that you choose to write your work.

    Great work!

    Much love,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-06-29 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi there, firstly I am going to nitpick..sorry! In the last line of your third stanza, I feel it would flow better without the 'that' and succeded in the second line of the same stanza should be succeeded.

    Apart from my nit picking, I like the poem. It made me think quite a bit. I thought about the reason behind the poem that the guy you talk of is a little bitter that he does things the right way and it never seems to work for him and yet the as*holes out there seem to get everything...I have to agree with your point! Strange isn't it. It made me wonder if 'nice' amounted to unconfident and that's why they never seem to be able to reach their goal?

    In my mind, nice guys are the winners. They are the ones who can honestly say they have got where they are by being who they are, no pretence, no bullsh*t, just by being and keeping it 'real'. I personally feel they are better qualities.

    Mel.
    | Posted on 2006-06-11 00:00:00 | by litllost | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a cool poem..
    I agree with littllost.. the last line kindof threw me cos of the grammer..

    mm..
    I havent made my mind up about this yet.. but im beggining to think that this is true..
    nice guys DO finish last..

    this made me think.. thanks

    shaun
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by shanu | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I gotta disagree with you on this one. I must say that nice guys can respect themselves and love themselves for the good people that they are. And any mature woman would prefer a nice guy that I can tell ya! And it may seem that the ass holes win in the present but in the future they end up with a ton of regrets. I have known many of them and their personalities never got them very far. A good honest and kind person is quality in my book and that goes for men and women alike. There are lots of jerks and ignorant people in the world. A good person is special just because they are a good person. And in the long run, they dont end up regretting this and that. They are content and happy with the decisions that they made in life. This is a good write. Nicely written and expressed but I gotta tell you, nice guys kick ass!! Take care my friend.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]


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