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    dots Submission Name: must be nice (verse 2)dots
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    Author: unknown soldier
    ASL Info:    17/kenner, La (N.O)
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 1348/1346/203
    Words: 260
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 1142
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsmust be nice (verse 2)dots
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    It must be nice having someone to hold
    Growing old and you still love em after the years have taken their toll
    Its so nice to have a lover who can joke and laugh
    Memories come rushing back as I stare at your photograph
    The feelings, I keep trying to hold em back
    You said I love you
    And I try not to remember how it felt when you told me that
    Going through this lonely act, pretending Im over it
    Real Unknown Soldier shit since were in a war for our hearts
    Trying to spar with the sharks who try to devour us from the start
    But its a useless effort since we just grown further apart
    It must be nice to reach that level of dedication
    Cuz the relationship gets higher expectations
    Maybe Love sent a delegation to make me jealous of those on the higher elevations
    I desire the revelations to reveal the concealed desperation
    And maybe I can deal with this hesitation
    Cuz its not nice, feeling that youre lacking the love
    Cuz after the hugs the kisses fade too
    So the love that once made you
    Can do the exact opposite of what it did to create you
    Is it an epiphany or is this feeling confusing me
    Stuck sitting here thinking just how nice it used to be

    Even when your life is going wrong
    Shell be by your side still holding on
    Even when those 20s stop spinning
    And all those gold digging women disappear
    Shell still be here




    Submitted on 2006-06-11 15:30:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      damn man, its like your taking the words out of my mout or some ish, you know........ Im definitly gonna read verse three...
    | Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]
      aaw bubz this was lovely,who knew a soldier could be so soft, i loved it i dont know what else to say, it flowed nice and it sent a tinglin sensation up my back whilst reading it for some strange reason,
    keep em cummin babe
    kyrenia
    | Posted on 2006-06-12 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      u a fag real [censored]
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by heavy knowledge | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really sweet!!! crap jess commented on like 2 more than me dammit!! ok! i think troy has been shot by cupid! hehehee!
    ~akaila~
    good job!
    | Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a little bit harder than the first one. I think you did a fine job spitting out these tight lines. The flow was good and so was your choice of words. It was not as good as the first one, but it was still very good. Another fav.

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Dammit man....okay check this out.....I'll get my keyboard out....and start up the Pro Tools....and you can do any remix that you like....and I'll bump it!

    You are carrying on your rugged ways with this touch of Lyfe himself. Who is in his rugged ways in a R & B way. I can really picture a duet of Lyfe and an emcee. The lyrics that you are putting down are very deep. A longing of what once was.....which shall never be again......must be nice to have that one thing that is special to hold onto forever. I'm feelin you pimpin......so long I have yearned for that permanent placement.....

    Once again.....Li Li applauds!

    Much love,

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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