BENAZIR by Psyve

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Author:	Psyve
ASL Info:	53/M/ Bahrain
Elite Ratio:	3.29 - 75/102/60
Words:	63

Class/Type:	Lyrics/Death
Total Views:	1177
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	418

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BENAZIR

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Benazir, your father’s in the ground-
Benazir, you watched them put him down-
Benazir, your father lied- he’d promised not to die,
And Benazir, you’d sworn you wouldn’t cry…

Benazir, your face has turned to stone-
Benazir, you do not weep alone…
Benazir, the winds of change that wipe your tears dry
Will blow your father’s killers from the sky…

Submitted on 2006-06-11 16:05:23 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Wow. Wow~ I really like this one. *gives a giant thumbs up*! And I like it better than your other one :DDD Ramneet's right - you've got a great punch at the end, and it's steramlined and gut-punching and altogether great :3 and original..... there's infinite ways to approach a single topic, that's why writing will never die.

And where'd the name Benazir come from? :D curious... ~Cora
| Posted on 2006-06-11 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]
Nice poem.Very well written short poem.Last few lines are very impactive.The topic of poem is very unique.
| Posted on 2006-06-11 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.