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    dots Submission Name: BENAZIRdots
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    Author: Psyve
    ASL Info:    53/M/ Bahrain
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 75/102/60
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Death
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    Benazir, your father’s in the ground-
    Benazir, you watched them put him down-
    Benazir, your father lied- he’d promised not to die,
    And Benazir, you’d sworn you wouldn’t cry…

    Benazir, your face has turned to stone-
    Benazir, you do not weep alone…
    Benazir, the winds of change that wipe your tears dry
    Will blow your father’s killers from the sky…





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      Wow. Wow~ I really like this one. *gives a giant thumbs up*! And I like it better than your other one :DDD Ramneet's right - you've got a great punch at the end, and it's steramlined and gut-punching and altogether great :3 and original..... there's infinite ways to approach a single topic, that's why writing will never die.

    And where'd the name Benazir come from? :D curious... ~Cora
    | Posted on 2006-06-11 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice poem.Very well written short poem.Last few lines are very impactive.The topic of poem is very unique.
    | Posted on 2006-06-11 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]


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