Fly Away

Author: Toxic Rose Elite Ratio:    5.82 - 159 /220 /97 Words: 113

Class/Type: Poetry /Love Total Views: 965 Average Vote:    3.0000 Bytes: 763

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Fly Away

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Fly away, my broken dove, Fly away to skies above Search for a heart that's clear and true- Search for one devoted to you. When nothing goes right And the happiness fades away You've gotta reach into your heart And search for the one who will never leave you There are arms who will hold you There are hearts who will forgive you Just remember Please remember I'll hold you up when your hope fades away I'll hold your heart I'll be your love I'll be there. Fly away, my broken dove, Fly away to skies above Search for a heart that's clear and true- Search for one devoted to you.

Submitted on 2006-06-11 16:37:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Personally, I think the flow from the first stanza to the mid section could be a little better, but it is fine probably as it is. The reiteration of the first stanza after the mid section was spectacularly effective. Keep up the good work. Joe P.S. - I need to comment more too...

| Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by SilverLightning | [ Reply to This ]

I liked this, it was pretty decent. The rhymes were fair and was so the rhythm. Love can hurt but it can also heal I sort of get the idea that one would want to heal love wounds with love. Enjoyed this Keep up the good work Be happy Jason

| Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]

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