Redemption

Author: Linkins_knot ASL Info:    14/Male/Behind a Computer Elite Ratio:    2.12 - 20 /46 /19 Words: 85

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Redemption

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The Day you make me become sad Is that same day that became of you mad I only tried to help and rid your disease Only selfishness pleased Don’t come to me for help I’ll only make you yelp… Your tears you give me to help you become pain-free Will be fears I give you back to help me feel glee So love, hate Waiting you’ve learned doesn’t seem to appreciate Maybe we’ll overcome and forgive each other then Or will our relationship end?

Submitted on 2006-06-11 23:40:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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All right, well it's kind of confusing... it makes my head spin alot... it's not that I don't like it, but it sort of bugs me. Like maybe it would be best suited as lyrics or part of a rap song than actual poetry. And it's sort of teen-angsty.

| Posted on 2006-06-12 00:00:00 | by lyssalover | [ Reply to This ]

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