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    dots Submission Name: Standing at the Edgedots
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    Author: Syndl
    ASL Info:    28/F/NC
    Elite Ratio:    5.02 - 56/55/19
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       When he broke my heart, all I could do was cry. When I had the chance to reclaim it, I panicked.


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    dotsStanding at the Edgedots
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    The edge is so close my toes touch the air.
    Are you here or are you there?
    I look through the clouds my head sits in,
    To find the one I am seeking.

    Is it time to jump or time to stand?
    I search vainly for your hand.
    Will you hold it tight?
    Or will you lose sight?

    Am I to fall or fly?
    Will we soar, you and I?
    My heart pounds in my earsÖ
    Iím letting go of all my fears.

    Standing near you, everything is right.
    Walking away, I start to cry.
    By your side, I want to stay
    And with your permission, I may.

    Just please donít leave me alone.
    I couldnít bear to have your love not my own.
    Am I to fall or fly?
    Will we soar, you and I?

    My thoughts are spiraling away.
    All I want is for you to stay.
    Is this something I should dare?
    Forgive my heart for being so scared.

    It happens so quickly, itís hard to see,
    What will become of you and me.
    I can only walk blind,
    And hope your heart finds mine.

    We will soar you and I?




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