Mr. Tornado by Nightraven

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Submission Name: Mr. Tornado dots

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Author:	Nightraven
ASL Info:	25/m/Poland
Elite Ratio:	4 - 276/321/79
Words:	119

Class/Type:	Lyrics/Misc
Total Views:	953
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	861

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Mr. Tornado dots

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there he comes
gonna blow us all
stand up, bow
jump before you fall

our houses stand
still stand like they stood
the trees get torn out
he's in lousy mood

make me feel like I'm real
that's the only deal
I can feel the cold wind's blow
hello mr. Tornado
hello mr. Tornado

say hello

break the walls
throw the cows
catch a truck
make them fly like crows

close the door
ain't enough to be?
count from ten
you're gonna fly like Dorothy

you better show me something new
something that I will not live through
spiral of wind playing it's show
hello mr. Tornado
hello mr. Tornado

say hello

Submitted on 2006-06-12 05:05:25 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  you know this song is nice and all... but it somehow gives me the feeling that the protagonist in this song would like to die. you know first he's like the tornado's coming he'll destroy everything, and then the house are still standin, then the chorus is like mr. tornado makes him feel real, you know makes him feel like he's alive, and then in the second chorus he's like show me something that'll kill me, i'm tired of almost dying, but not really.

i don't know. that's how i interpret it. it's a cry for death. and the tornado is just a symbol for it. it's amazing how few good pieces of literature there actually are on this site. this is one.
| Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by Zu | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really good
I Love the way you brought this together
And yes this could easioly be transferred into a song beautifully
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| Posted on 2006-06-12 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  ^________^ YAY *tackles* It's great to see lyrics from you... or perhaps it's great to see me actually online and reviewing solidly for more than two days in a row? :D~ The point is... this is adorable! X3.... okay... maybe not adorable. But I like how you really give the tornado a personality, and there's enough hints that it could possibly be a metaphor... but that's not certain either. I love it. :DD i'ts simple enough to be a sweet, enjoyable song; but complicated enough to make you think. Yay~ Coraz
| Posted on 2006-06-12 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]

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