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    dots Submission Name: Mr. Tornadodots
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    Author: Nightraven
    ASL Info:    25/m/Poland
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 276/321/79
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dotsMr. Tornadodots
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    there he comes
    gonna blow us all
    stand up, bow
    jump before you fall

    our houses stand
    still stand like they stood
    the trees get torn out
    he's in lousy mood

    make me feel like I'm real
    that's the only deal
    I can feel the cold wind's blow
    hello mr. Tornado
    hello mr. Tornado

    say hello

    break the walls
    throw the cows
    catch a truck
    make them fly like crows

    close the door
    ain't enough to be?
    count from ten
    you're gonna fly like Dorothy

    you better show me something new
    something that I will not live through
    spiral of wind playing it's show
    hello mr. Tornado
    hello mr. Tornado

    say hello




    Submitted on 2006-06-12 05:05:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you know this song is nice and all... but it somehow gives me the feeling that the protagonist in this song would like to die. you know first he's like the tornado's coming he'll destroy everything, and then the house are still standin, then the chorus is like mr. tornado makes him feel real, you know makes him feel like he's alive, and then in the second chorus he's like show me something that'll kill me, i'm tired of almost dying, but not really.

    i don't know. that's how i interpret it. it's a cry for death. and the tornado is just a symbol for it. it's amazing how few good pieces of literature there actually are on this site. this is one.
    | Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by Zu | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good
    I Love the way you brought this together
    And yes this could easioly be transferred into a song beautifully
    Incidently my Family is From your Next door neighbor Lithuania
    Please keep in touch
    We probably have a lot of stories to share
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-06-12 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      ^________^ YAY *tackles* It's great to see lyrics from you... or perhaps it's great to see me actually online and reviewing solidly for more than two days in a row? :D~ The point is... this is adorable! X3.... okay... maybe not adorable. But I like how you really give the tornado a personality, and there's enough hints that it could possibly be a metaphor... but that's not certain either. I love it. :DD i'ts simple enough to be a sweet, enjoyable song; but complicated enough to make you think. Yay~ Coraz
    | Posted on 2006-06-12 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]


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