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Author: kingsley
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the world is nice but the only thing that is constant is change but before we should ask ourseleves is it for the best???????


The green grasses smiled at me as i flew across the valley
yes the sky was blue infact he was so close
i saw the shy sun blush at the sight of some beautiful flowers
yes i saw men going up and down in groups
while the tall trees were always waving at the dancing wind
it was okay then even the sea and her children lay still
tell me;what a place this world would be if these things dont change

Submitted on 2006-06-12 09:12:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  saw the shy sun blush .. i like this line,, the idea of the sun slowly coming up to smile at whatever beauty remains here in earth. I also like hjow you personified the wind.. and nature...
nature the one thing that changes and still remains constant!!!
| Posted on 2006-06-12 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
  this gives me a beautiful feeling, theres moments like these in life.. if your able to find time to capture it in words, it may not living up to the feeling, but somewhat, because words always say what your eyes are unable to.
| Posted on 2006-06-12 00:00:00 | by SetmyselfonFire | [ Reply to This ]

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