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    dots Submission Name: You don't love medots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    23/Female/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.68 - 277/293/232
    Words: 292
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 608
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1960



    Description:
       well, what else is there left to say?


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    dotsYou don't love medots
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    I'm done waiting
    and I asked for an answer
    But it wasn't the answer I wanted you to give me.

    I told you I love you
    I spilled out my heart.
    And you just say this could never be.

    And now you
    just think i should be fine
    I really love you but you just can't see.

    Don't tell me no.
    Don't tell me this can't be.
    Don't tell me no
    Don't tell me you don't love me.
    Don't tell me no
    Don't tell this can't be.
    Don't tell me no
    Don't tell me you don't love me.
    Don't tell me you don't love me.

    Now I don't know
    what I can say to you.
    Cause I have nothing else to say.

    Did you know
    You were on my mind
    every single night and day.

    Do you know
    that I can't look you in the face
    because everything is not ok.

    Don't tell me no
    Don't tell me this can't be
    Don't tell me no
    Don't tell me you don't love me.
    Don't tell me no
    Don't tell me this can't be.
    Don't tell me no.
    Don't tell me you don't love me.
    Don't tell me you don't love me.

    Now tell me,
    can you see me cry?
    Now tell me,
    Look me the eye.
    Now tell me,
    can you see me cry?
    Now tell me,
    look me in the eye.

    Don't tell me no
    Don't tell me this can't be.
    Don't tell me no
    Don't tell me you don't love me.
    Don't tell me no
    Don't tell me this can't be.
    Don't tell me no.
    Don't tell me you don't love me.
    Don't tell me you don't love me.





    Submitted on 2006-06-12 10:19:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I wanted to comment on the piece "I will always love you" but then i saw your other piece "You don't love me" and thought i had to read it first before i can actually comment because i thought it related to one another and it did...

    In the first piece you wrote about being rejected by someone you love and although that person hurted you, still you love him.

    The second piece, you wanted it more lyrical, so you pretty much wrote back the same piece in a different version. It's okay and although written from the heart, i feel like it's just one of those moments when you wanted something but didn't get it, so you feel like that. I had a time when i thought i was in love with someone but then after a while, i was okay and said to myself "What on earth was i thinking?!'' Still, although touching, i really don't think this is love you are talking about.

    Anyhow, would love to hear how it sounds. I'm sure you have a nice beat to it. And don't worry about this situation. It happens all the time...What will make things okay is to keep going and find something else to do...If you keep thinking about it, you'll drive yourself crazy for no good reason...Just take it as an experience.

    Do take care until next time we meet.

    Irina
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      heart rending..this was um sad..very depressing..I would love to hear it sung, and see what feeling I get from that..The flow was great, then again its lyrics, so it has a beat..I guess..Anyway this a feeling I know oh too well, (story time!). I went through that almost same conversation with my ex, I told him I loved him..and that I wanted to be with him still, he just sorta blew me off..F*ck that then..then he comes back and tries to win me over again..Bleh bleh bleh, the story continues, lol. Anywho lovely piece, great lyrics, keep up the great work!!

    Lucy
    | Posted on 2006-06-12 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]


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