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    dots Submission Name: Lisadots
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    Author: broken angelz
    ASL Info:    12...F...MI
    Elite Ratio:    4.48 - 17/14/8
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
    Total Views: 486
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    Bytes: 1214



    Description:
       This is about a friend of mine (Lisa) having marriage problems. It is just sort of something to look to for some uplift and advice. She needs to leave him, and know that God is watching over her, and so are her friends. Just something I whipped up after havinga dream about them two. I know the rhyming isnt consistent, but oh well.


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    dotsLisadots
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    Once, they were two young love birds,
    Singing upon the trees.
    But after too many fights,
    They found themselves aking God
    To please, help them, please!
    Today, their souls are lost forever
    In one another's heart.
    They don't know where they'll end up,
    Where should they restart?
    When I look into HER eyes,
    They show tears, and fear lies,
    They show prayer, hope, and pain,
    But does HE feel the same?
    Think about this:

    "Love always protects. It always trusts. It always hopes. It never gives up. It never fails." 1 Corinthians 13:7-8

    So tell me, Lisa, is this really love?

    "What we are suffering now is nothing compared to glory that will be shown in us." Romans 8:18

    "The lord knows how to keep godly people safe in times of testing. 2 Peter 2:9

    Please believe, and hold on to all of your hope and faith in the lord. HE knows what he is doing. And we are always going to be there for you, Lisa. Know that you are surrounded by love, holiness, and smiles, and the pain is only here for a while.




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