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    dots Submission Name: Two yearsdots
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    Author: sweetme16
    ASL Info:    21/f/who cares
    Elite Ratio:    2.21 - 108/252/162
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 809
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 791



    Description:
       this is about me seeing chris after two years, and realizing everything that i've discribed in the poem.


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    dotsTwo yearsdots
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    2 years have gone by
    I canít believe that itís been that long
    Its seems like just yesterday
    When I last saw you
    I remember saying good-bye
    Like it was yesterday
    The pain has dulled over the long months
    But its still there
    I donít think that itíll ever go away
    I remember crying and whispering
    If only I didnít have to move away
    I also remember you telling me that it was okay
    That everything happens for a reason
    Now I realize what you truly meant
    I know that I needed to mature and change
    And that would have not happened there
    Now seeing you again after so long
    Has told me that youíll always have a special place in heart
    After all you were my first love




    Submitted on 2006-06-12 12:47:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i like this poem. its more like a stoy though. it made me feel.. well i dumped my boyfriend a few weeks ago and it reminded me of that. The line I 'remember crying and whispering' touched me. it reminded me when i cried and whispered the painful words to him that it was over. i no i was a different stiuation but still.. i like this poem. maybe you could improve it by making it rhyme or give it a beat or something.
    well this was my 1st ever comment. lol
    well done

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    | Posted on 2006-06-14 00:00:00 | by faded | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a good poem and its great that you feel that feeling over a guy but it also sux becuz it just does ok well good job

    shasta
    | Posted on 2006-07-02 00:00:00 | by easily_ammused | [ Reply to This ]
      this is exactly what is goin on with me right now, it's goin on my favs and its very true..
    lizzie
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by angeldust | [ Reply to This ]


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