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    dots Submission Name: PARTING SONGdots
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    Author: Psyve
    ASL Info:    53/M/ Bahrain
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 75/102/60
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Lyrics/The pain inside
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    dotsPARTING SONGdots
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    Why is it that I must always end the things I start?
    And why am I the only one who takes these things to heart?
    And why is it that you donít feel a part of what I feel?
    And can you tell me if my hurt is real?

    Why is it I always give much more than I intend?
    And why am I the one who always gets hurt in the end?
    And why is it that Iím the one who must apologize?
    And why is there no sadness in your eyes?




    Submitted on 2006-06-12 15:39:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Like most of my lyrics on this board, this one was originally written as a song and, should you care to, you can hear me perform it by clicking on the link below

    http://soundclick.com/share?songid=8583241

    If you do have the patience, I would be very interested to know what you think of it.

    Psyve
    | Posted on 2010-04-16 00:00:00 | by Psyve | [ Reply to This ]
      :D! The change in rhythm in the ending lines really make them stand out, yaaaaay... hm I like it but it doesn't... like... jump out at me, yano? It seems more like an i needed to write this to comfort myself sort of poem, which is great buuut sometimes not as interesting for an outsider. :D~ Cora
    | Posted on 2006-06-16 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]


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