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    dots Submission Name: EVERY MOMENT, EVERY DAYdots
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    Author: Psyve
    ASL Info:    53/M/ Bahrain
    Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 75/102/60
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    dotsEVERY MOMENT, EVERY DAYdots
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    You know its not just rainy days
    That I love you-
    You know I love you
    Every moment, every day…
    And its not just 'coz I'm going away,
    That I think I want to hear you say
    You'll miss me every moment,
    Every day…

    And, if you miss me in the morning
    And you think of me every night,
    You know I won't be gone a moment
    From your sight…


    You know its not just summer days,
    But through all of every season's ways-
    You know, I've loved you
    All these moments, all these days…
    And you know its not just Separation's pain
    That makes me wanna hear you sayin'
    You'll never ever let me leave you
    For a moment again…

    You know, I miss you in the morning,
    And I think of you every night,
    And you've never for one moment
    Left my sight…




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      These lyrics were simple, but yet so full of love. I'm jealous of whoever you wrote these lyrics about because these are great lyrics. They flowed really well, and though there was rhyme, it wasn't so out there, like HEY I RHYME in your face type of thing, it was very suttle but yet very effective.

    "You know its not just summer days,
    But through all of every season's ways-
    You know, I've loved you
    All these moments, all these days…
    And you know its not just Separation's pain
    That makes me wanna hear you sayin'
    You'll never ever let me leave you
    For a moment again…"

    That was my favorite verse, it's like you're saying nothing could come between your love for this person. Very sweet

    Great write!

    ~Kriss
    | Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]
      sounds like you love this person for their soul and would love them through all of lifes trials and lifes blessings

    i really like how it all went together it was straight to the point and from the heart

    sounds like true love to me

    great work

    love
    nadine
    God Bless you always
    | Posted on 2006-08-22 00:00:00 | by lostspirit | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, this is so sweet! I wish someone loved and missed me every moment of every day. I think you are marvelous to write something so sweet and sentimental...

    You know its not just rainy days
    That I love you-
    You know I love you
    Every moment, every day…

    You know, I miss you in the morning,
    And I think of you every night,
    And you've never for one moment
    Left my sight…

    These were my two favorite parts!!!

    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]


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