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Author: Deep Ace Thinks
ASL Info:    35/M/ Spring, TX
Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 124 /190 /60
Words: 70
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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slow moving train takes me further down the line
home disappears like a grain of sand in the sea
if I count my blessings and don’t waste my time
one day I’ll find the person that I should be
my fear and my faith walk hand in hand
like two dear childhood friends
deep in my mind I can fashion a plan
that ends where my journey begins

Submitted on 2004-05-13 16:29:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It's dramatic in a mellow dramatic way.
Not to take anything away from the piece though, I just like that it's a relaxed piece without the bells and whistles!
For me this is the way it should have been presented.
The image, the nature of the words and the collective expression all make so much more impact in this relaxed fashion.

"my fear and my faith walk hand in hand
like two dear childhood friends"

That expression is magic!
| Posted on 2006-12-27 00:00:00 | by danativ | [ Reply to This ]
  I've just broken up with my boyfriend for the very reason that I need some space.

This is me.

| Posted on 2004-05-18 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]
  wow... this is pretty neat. i like the topic and your words in general... And remember, it is not always the destination, but many times the journey that counts and makes an impact on our lives...
| Posted on 2004-05-15 00:00:00 | by Dandan | [ Reply to This ]
  I loved the fear & faith walk hand-in-hand line too! You rock what else can I say...good write, good meditation! Talk @ ya later gator! I am outta here..check ya w/road trip updates!!! weeeeeee!!! Love, Peace, Joy!!!
| Posted on 2004-05-13 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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