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    Author: taramarie
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 54/107/61
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
    Total Views: 1103
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1062



    Description:
       bitter, desparate.
    a short letter to a lover left untouched.


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    you might have baked your soul into mine, dipped your tongue into my sugars and tasted the only sweetness i truely have. Have you ever felt the heat the flushes through me when i'm so angry that i break glass just hear myself? Have you ever kissed my lips when they are so blue and chapped that i could almost lose you inside the cracks? You know the answer is no. You feel that void. You feel it biting at the pit in your stomach that you fill with whiskey and crackers. C'mon love, i know you better than that. I know you trace my words with your hands and smell the paper that i wrote on. My scent is all you smell. Sugar plums can take you to the soft skin of my neck, the soft fabrics of my clothes, and the curl of my hair.

    I play dead to all the boys that want to take me to bed. They run their lines and i dip my knife into my hot chocolate and watch. Swirl the sweetness and lick the edge. I feel bad, i don't know how to say the word no, i just walk away.

    I'm giving into the charms of the vacuous life




    Submitted on 2006-06-12 20:41:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey, i think edge is a really good way to describe it, and it is very unusual. Well done, being unique is probably one of the hardest things about writing. charlie x
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by Charlie Poppins | [ Reply to This ]
      Finally a poem on this effing site that has a little ..edge, that is powerful and well written. I am so sick of reading CRAP from little 15 yr olds who DO NOT HAVE A CLUE. Thank you for this refreshing post. I loved it..the imagery the language etc. I apologize for my stupid unoriginal comment but its 1:30 in the morning and thats all i got.
    | Posted on 2006-06-12 00:00:00 | by brokensmile | [ Reply to This ]
      kinda annoying to have people say 15 year olds dont have a clue.. for all we know. she is 15. i dont think she is.. but we never know. and i happen to know some people on here that are 15 that write better some people on here that are 25. deffinitely better than a lot of 17 year olds.. anyhow. id already read this, its good, i didnt like it as much as all your other stuff..... it just made me sad.
    | Posted on 2006-06-14 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]


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