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    dots Submission Name: The Rose out of Thornsdots

    Author: Darkstar9500
    ASL Info:    18/male/Missouri
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 39/56/19
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       I LOVE U NIKKI!!! This is only the beginning of many poems to come about you!! You have no idea what you've done for me!!

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    dotsThe Rose out of Thornsdots

    Stumbling and falling
    Feeling the blood soak the ground
    Continuing on in the darkness
    with no goal, nothing to fight for

    Haunted by the shadow
    created out of darkness
    A pale light lingers
    light in the darkness of my own soul

    A single rose admist threating thorns
    Reaching for this beauty I feel no thorns
    I can't feel pain, numb

    Holding this great treasure
    I adore its beauty
    its light warms my face
    as fresh blood begins to dry

    The soft petals wash away the blood
    The cool scent brings comfort in this blaze
    The power to feel pain has left
    but this rose has brought nothing but beauty

    It's beauty distracts from shadow demon
    The beast who struggles to get free
    A single rose has created
    a paradise out of hell

    An angel out of a beast
    A paradise out of a hell
    A rose out of thorns

    Submitted on 2006-06-12 21:02:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      *is left breathless*, what have you got there hidden in the depths of your mind kind sir?
    Again, this is a very beautiful piece, I love this dark you portray. Vibrant and vivid.
    | Posted on 2006-11-14 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really powerful
    In this write you show others there is a way out of the darkness in your case it was the Love of another
    I really liked how you said she stopped all thorns and danger from preventing the beautiful rose from blooming
    Very Nicely said and Done
    God Bless

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      thats an amazing poem, im super glad shes helped u thru so much. im sorry i hurt u so bad. reading that brought tears to my eyes... ok, so they were running down my face and i cried so hard i couldnt read n e more, but im sorry.
    | Posted on 2006-06-12 00:00:00 | by CutMeDeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow Rick I didnt know you had found love. Why didnt you tell me anything. Well it seems everyone can find it but me. Oh well I guess. I hope you have a great life with her and she treats good the way you need to be treated because you are truly a nice guy thats needs to be loved for your hurt that you have went through. You ahve suffered enough. Well best fo wishes and I send my love. Bye rick.


    Great poem. It was so nice.
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by POETRY | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this must be the most amazing poem that i have ever read. im speachless i mean when i read it i got the chills and i couldnt stop smiling. i dont have anywords that could bring what i feel about this poem any justice. i cant believe it. gosh i really dont know what to say and i feel so stupid bc of it lol. i guess all i can say is that it is amazing but what can u expect when the writer is you.
    i love u rick.

    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]
      What a sweet tribute. It's amazing how one person can change how you look at life and how you relate to things. I'm glad you've found someone to bring you a bit of light and happiness...everyone deserves it.

    Reaching for this beauty I feel no thorns
    I can't feel pain
    I have become numb out of pain

    The only thing I'd change it to stop the previous line with the word numb.... I think it has more power and will flow better into the next stanza.

    | Posted on 2006-06-12 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]

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