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    dots Submission Name: Nothing Else Mattersdots
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    Author: RedRoseofBlood
    ASL Info:    19/f/outsideyourwindow
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 592/582/135
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1200
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Something I wrote a while ago. All comments are welcome.


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    dotsNothing Else Mattersdots
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    If you can't explain how you feel
    You have seen something too horrific
    You are left breathless
    You cannot describe it
    Cannot think
    Words become only obstacles
    Blockaded in your mind
    Bringing no aid, just silence
    Heartbreaking, stifiling quiet
    The questions racing through your head
    Have no answers
    Why some things turn out the wrong way
    May never be known
    Bare, artless facts are all that can be dealt with
    You have nothing else
    And nothing else matters




    Submitted on 2006-06-13 08:16:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oooh i love this.
    "you have nothing else
    end nothing else matters"

    I know this feeling, I know it well. when you can't see, when you understand but you still don't get it.

    pain, fear, panic, theese are emotions that rush through me when i read.

    really good
    | Posted on 2007-03-27 00:00:00 | by Wolfie | [ Reply to This ]
      Like marigold, I admire how you showed me a state of feelings that I never thought about much, but it certainly happens a lot and is confusing to deal with, and I end up going: "Anyway, gotta accept this and move on ..."

    I want to say stuff about your verse-form and lines and so on; but I don't think there is anything you ought to change about your way of doing poetry so what the hell, please be encouraged anyway, even when things go awry!
    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      I must say that this was a fairly accurate description of how I've felt more than once, its pretty interesting how you were able to capture it so precisely.
    in addition, the short lines, which are often uneven in pace, and interspersed with commas add odd points only serve to make the pace more breakneck and hectic, which in turn exactly fits the underlying mood.
    this was exiting to read!
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by marigold | [ Reply to This ]
      "my hat is off to you rose of blood ../. this is veery outstanding piece of rain and storm .../.
    not one word is artless, this is beauty at it's sad'ess!"


    bloodstone

    tophatmagazine

    u could suck u could lose


    GIR should be under your bed
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]


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