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Where It Belongs...


Author: wallya20
ASL Info:    18/m/Bahamas
Elite Ratio:    8 - 113 /68 /26
Words: 293
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Gettin my baby back


Where It Belongs...



At the pier, I'm leaving
What did you think?
During those precious moments in your life
Standing in pause whilst everyone around you goes on
.......
You look from the corner of your eyes
There I am
Your first everything
But your hindered by the asshole you call a boyfriend
To hurt to move you use his shoulder to cry
Each tear brings vivid memories of only one
.......
Running down your cheek onto his sleeve
Realizing he isn't worth it he doesn't deserve the honor
Of comforting you
I'm still walking by but you can't move
Desperately telling yourself to reach, to call...
There I am thinking about how you hurt me
Head down, hands clinched, emotions sinking
Finally you moved, pushing him away
Moving toward me
As you get closer I move farther
You look at the blades of grass in front of me
And watch the tears hit them 1 by 1
They now carry the sorrow as the lay dying
Now your telling yourself to leave
Just leave, you have caused enough pain
Turning around you noticed warmth
Then you see arms wrapping around you waist
So perfect exactly where they belong
Seeing tears run down your breasts
Exactly where they belong
You turned around and starred at my cheeks...
Opening your mouth you said "I'm sor"...shhh
I pressed my fingers against your lips
We belong here right now
No apologies just Love Me Again
You never even noticed as we walked into my room
As I lay you down, legs open my mouth between
Sweat rising on your stomach
Raised heartbeats and long breaths
I cradle your head... Thrusting deeper and deeper
Love is where it belongs in this moment
With me......




Submitted on 2006-06-13 11:59:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  aaw bubz this was soo sweet, i think i was fallin for a moment then lol you have a great talent for showing your emotions in such depth, i wanted to read more from you, so i will be chekin out more of your work,
keep em cummin
kyrenia
| Posted on 2006-06-14 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
  That was great, it was daring of you to be so sensual and I like it..it was very good and the speliing erroe were limited in comparison to other things I've read..but imagery...it was..great..I mean really great...so going on my favoritea...Keep it up...

-Anya
| Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by FarawayFeelings | [ Reply to This ]
  hey hun, sweet write, you are amazing at writing love themes, I haven't even tried in a while. good emotion hun, not sure what to say, hope things work out, I guess that's one thing that only time will tell on anyway good write, I'm not gonna say too much more.
peace and luv,
~jess
| Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
  Hm, this was interesting. Sweet yet, hott? lol. There were two spelling errors, like "dieing" should be "dying", and when you said:

"Just leave you have cost enough pain"

Shouldn't it be:

"Just leave, you have caused enough pain"

Dunno, anyways..Once again, your poem captures me..Your description blew me away, I could feel everything..You loved her, and you were waiting for her to just leave this so called fu-ck of boyfriend..I've been there, I was there like a week ago..Kind of sucks, ya know? Just waiting...and hoping, that this person will come to you..And when they do, its a happy ending, for now. The ending to this piece was interesting, it switched from being all "happy mushy" to being "sex", haha. But I liked the transition, just shows that this girl and you should be together, the way its suppose to be..Nice job with this piece, definetely going on my favs. Anywho keep up the great work, hope to see more from you soon. Take Care, best of wishes.

Lucy
| Posted on 2006-06-17 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]


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