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    dots Submission Name: wanderdots
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    Author: littlepoet
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 688/544/259
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Misc/
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    Average Vote:    3.5000
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    dots wanderdots
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    wander

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    The wolf wanders aimlessly
    through his domain
    king of his life and all his space
    he is graceful and mystical
    he is mysterious and quiet
    do you hear his midnight cry?

    his mission to find a mate
    a love that last
    he wanders alone through time and space
    searching for fulfillment
    Howling out his loneliness
    Hopeing for a return of his call
    Do you hear his call?

    he tires of his freedom
    as he longs for love
    Loseing his faith in his strength
    lost in a world unknown to him
    Can you hear his call?

    he wants to know his own plan
    To know where he belongs
    And how lives in world full of hate
    A world full of sorrow and pain
    Where brighther tomorrows don't exist
    Can you hear his call?

    Maybe one day his pain and sorrow
    Will be washed a way
    Maybe his mate will answer his cry
    Maybe the world wil no longer
    his shout for his mournful plead
    To the moon above the earth
    High above







    Submitted on 2006-06-13 15:33:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      one word:spectacular :)
    | Posted on 2006-11-22 00:00:00 | by DesecratedDream | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay, this was a poem that gave me butterflies....because my boyfriend has an obsession with wolves and just the way this poem was written, so dark yet beautiful totally reminded me of him when we first met. Truely amazing poem, going on my fav's.
    | Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by Autum-Moon | [ Reply to This ]
      Well...That one made me think. The way you used the words, made me feel the emotion. It was pretty deep. I liked it. Very nice.

    *eyes of bleu*

    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by eyes of bleu | [ Reply to This ]
      This is showing up, well, doubled, did you enter it twice on accident? Might want to fix that if you did. Otherwise its' pretty good, not my style but everyone to their own. Its good that it was about an animal since most of the entries here are about the lives of humans, it's unique. Never give in to mediocrity. I also want to say that at some points i was thrown off because of typos, you may want to proof read your works before posting them so the reader doesnt get fustrated. Otherwise, lovely, keep up the good work.

    - Karyn
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by Karynmrm | [ Reply to This ]
      Ello,

    Nice job, This poem reminds me of someone I know who is very wolf like. The emotion was also very good along with the wording.

    Raven
    | Posted on 2006-06-14 00:00:00 | by Silent_Tears | [ Reply to This ]


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