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    dots Submission Name: Sheer Kindnessdots
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    Author: smartblond
    ASL Info:    18/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 97/114/33
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 1004
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Description:
       When i wrote this poem I was think of all the people who are starving and dying even in our own country. People who are hopeless we need to be shown that someone still cares about them. Did you know every 5seconds a child dies from hunger related causes


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    My heart keeps aching
    My body won't stop shaking
    My tears keep on breaking
    As they hit the ground

    I cry for those who have no home
    No real place to call their own
    I'm sick for those who are without hope
    what can they do but sit and mope

    I ache for all the sick
    As with life plays on them
    Its cruel and wicked tricks

    To these we must show we care
    with these we must love and share
    Prove to them there is still good
    Ask them if they kindly would
    Fight with us this endless fight
    So to others we may bring light

    To reach more people that have no hope
    With their troubles we must help them cope
    So I pour out my heart to thee
    Please here now my endless plea

    To show someone you do care
    Just be nice and always fair
    And join us in our on going fight
    To spread to all unending light






    Submitted on 2006-06-13 16:55:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Honestly, It was written great.

    But, my real question... is writing a poem and posting online helping anyone?

    You talk about change, then try to do something to MAKE that change.

    Be a part of the movement.
    | Posted on 2006-10-24 00:00:00 | by Pprophet | [ Reply to This ]
      People do care about them, there are millions of foundations trying to help these staving people. Sooner of later I think that world will go under another depression, very quickly. But eh, I liked this piece, brought up an issue that people might forget ever now and then. But, people do care and think about these people who are suffering. Only so many can actually help, and make a difference. It takes a lot of power to change something like that, I mean there are ALYWAYS going to be people that are suffering, its life. Its how they and we deal with it that counts. Anywho nice piece, great opinion, good job. Take care!

    Lucy
    | Posted on 2006-06-15 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good. It is sad that there are so many out there without a home, but rainbow is right. A lot do care about them and are doing all they can to help. But even if there are a lot of people trying to help, they can't help everyone. There's just to many. This is a good message to those who don't know about what's going on in this world, and also for the all the people who are without a home. Like you said, they do need to know that we do care about them. Great work.

    ~Piper
    | Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]


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