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    dots Submission Name: First kissdots
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    Author: Localfreak
    ASL Info:    37, Maybe, Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 131/123/76
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 885
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 473



    Description:
       Just wanted to put my feelings, for my favourite of all things onto paper.

    I guess I will never know anothers perspective on this subject but this one is my perfect moment in life.


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    dotsFirst kissdots
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    Breath felt upon a cheek
    A loving brush of lips ‘cross neck
    The whisper in an awaiting ear
    The warmth of skin on skin

    A breath drawn deep from through soft hair
    The passion held with tender care
    While earthquakes pound beneath the breast
    As love is almost won

    Another breath to breathe as one
    A taste of which is not yet known
    So tentative the softest meeting
    Of loves first kiss




    Submitted on 2006-06-13 18:18:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice poem you got there, I loved it, it shows all the steps into a first kiss, and isnt it magnificent? the first kiss, the thing that you always remember in all your life, it's just great, but some other first kisses just suck, mine for exemple, with someone I didnt even love, wasted, never counted it as a first kiss, i forgot it, and made my real first kiss with my ex-gf, it was wonderful, and i loved it, isnt kissing the best way to share feelings with someone which is truely love? I think it's the best way, a gentle,soft thing making us feel everything we feel for the other peson, and feeling everything the other person wants us to know, or just words, insted of words a kiss can tell everything you want to tell them, isn't it great, anyway I hope you loved it, and you kissed someone you really loved as a first kiss, cause a first kiss is the best we can remember especially if its good, and you really loved it, and you dont want to let go, isn't it magical, anyway I hope you liked it, take care,

    Wolfy-
    | Posted on 2006-06-16 00:00:00 | by Wolfeye_666 | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this, you did some justice to the idea of loves first kiss. I enjoyed reading this. Thanks for sharing.

    Keep up the good work

    Be happy

    Jason
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]


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