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    dots Submission Name: Will you promise this?dots
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    Author: atonement
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWill you promise this?dots
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    you promised me this forever feeling, something we had. But when the music has stopped and everything had been said, please promise me that what we had won't be dead.

    Will you still be my superhero? Will you be the one who still saves me from the fall? Will you still be my beacon in the fog of night? Will you promise me that you'll me the truth even though its not alright?


    you promised me not to look any other way than with your loving eyes. You said you would always see my wings. But when you wake up to relaity, will everything still be the same? Please promise me that you'll never play the lies of this game.

    Will you still be my superhero? Will you be the one who still saves me from the fall? Will you still be my beacon in the fog of night? Will you promise me that you'll me the truth even though its not alright?

    Please promise me this




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      Will you still be my beacon in the fog of night?

    i dont think that line fits. but otherwise i like it. i thnk its cute. good write keep writing. mayb elook over this piece.

    xoxooxx
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by crazzybeautiful | [ Reply to This ]
      no offense crazt beutiful but that line TO ME fits perfectly. keep writting many people write in their own styles and thats what gives poetry a endless potetial. keep writing i like the yearning in this poem, it gave me some epathy, for the person in the poem (you, or womever it is) i like the constant questions while keeping up with the timing at the same time

    good job

    L.O.
    | Posted on 2006-06-13 00:00:00 | by lone_one | [ Reply to This ]


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